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10-24-03, 01:11 PM | #1 | ||||||
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~~~Aint no stopping Death~~~
IP: 06EF 4E9D
jes lettin yall know, if u see a line ending with "~" and the other line starts with "~" is jes indicating that theres not really a pause between the lines, or a really really short pause
ight keystyled My mind's filled with hate thoughts that create plots to raid spots~ ~And generate shots from the .38 tossed~ ~To me, from my man Jay who've slaid more heathens Than Buffy the Slayer does creature-like demons Seasons of bloodshed and chaos purges my heart Till a luminous beam descends from the heavens dividing the darkness apart~ ~In two halves returning a state of equilibrium to my soul My cerebrum cannot hold 'n' when medievel drums start to roll~ ~The man on the pale horse has arrived to remove all forms of Godliness~ ~Bringing with him, the other three horsemen of Apocalypse Aint no stopping this....we all gots to die... So say your last prayers...*click click*....goodbye if ya'll really ponder on it, ull get the story..... |
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10-24-03, 05:04 PM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: 1965 93D3
can i get some feedback on this joint man, would really appreciate it
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10-24-03, 09:38 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: F03F CA7D
bro i was definetly feelin that, maybe its just that it flowed really
well wit the beat that i was listening too, but i think that was tight yo, keep droppin, []Deace |
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10-24-03, 10:56 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 1965 93D3
thnx fo tha feed, lets get some more feed on this shit
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10-25-03, 05:09 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 661E B7CE
hit dis post up yo
dont sleep on this |
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10-25-03, 05:22 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: B268 BBFE
I was feeling what you was writing about. .I think your structure needs some work man. .Your vocab was very good & the highlight of this piece. .The rhymes were basicly complex. .I mean no inters of multis but long words. .no doubt it flowed well . . Props
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