RapVerse.com Community
 Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End RV Radio  

Go Back   RapVerse.com Community > Fresh From The Lab > Textual Releases
User Name
Password
FAQ Calendar Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read

Reply
 
Thread Tools Search this Thread Display Modes
Old 01-24-04, 08:14 AM   #1
Tommy the 45
Guest
 
Posts: n/a
Joined:
Status:
Text Record: 0-1
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
I'm Sorry

IP: 4CEF 0D91

My dad busted custard guess the condom wasn't trusted/
16 years and hes never got adjusted.
Born with a disability seemed to be a liablity/
Hospital visits only mom wanted to come with me.
Dad concealing me wishing he had never bust/
A sick baby with screw's already covered by rust.
Every parent wants their child to be born healthy/
You fealt you couldn't help me, that's why you'd belt me.
Half of you is in me to make me and still you hate me/
not just lately...forsaked me since I been a baby.
Must be the reason why sometimes I hate myself/
it was like I was you when that hate I fealt.
Blame me for having me that's why you're always mad at me/
so I'm sorry for the agony I caused this family.
It was all fine 'till labour day...came to stay/
sorry I was born this way, made your sky's gray.
But you never accepted me I never fealt protected/
love you kept it so I always fealt neglected.
I'm leaving 'cos you're only there to give me beatings/
scars gone but mental pain will never start healing.
So I proclaimed myself the legitimate bastard/
dad was around for my questions but never answered.
I wasn't part of the plan when you got laid/
use to wish I'd be the best mistake you ever made.

I'm sorry...wish we could have got along...
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-24-04, 09:01 AM   #2
young mike
young mike-young bangers-
 
young mike's Avatar
 
Posts: 151
Joined: Dec 2003
From: new haven
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-3
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 399E F0FD

ato i was feeling this shit it was straight up as fuck i like how yo a nebie writen good peices like this one and your new you could have a vary good repution by 100 post who know what this could be i also liked how you got deep into it
__________________
JR.delinquents
Send a message via AIM to young mike   Reply With Quote
Old 01-24-04, 09:04 AM   #3
Tommy the 45
Guest
 
Posts: n/a
Joined:
Status:
Text Record: 0-1
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 4CEF 0D91

Aye thanks man...more feedback anyone?
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-24-04, 09:17 AM   #4
code-187
Light Weight
 
code-187's Avatar
 
Posts: 281
Joined: Jan 2004
From: ENGLAND
Status: Offline
IP: DF7B C8F7

nice piece just work on vocab an youll elevate
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-24-04, 09:58 AM   #5
Tommy the 45
Guest
 
Posts: n/a
Joined:
Status:
Text Record: 0-1
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 4CEF 0D91

Come on...tons of people checked this out but didn't reply.
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-24-04, 11:06 AM   #6
Tommy the 45
Guest
 
Posts: n/a
Joined:
Status:
Text Record: 0-1
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 4CEF 0D91

Anyone???
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-24-04, 03:30 PM   #7
VennyRhymes
New to RB
 
VennyRhymes's Avatar
 
Posts: 80
Joined: Jan 2004
Status: Offline
Text Record: 1-1
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 742D 1A94

Feelin This! Sometimes it lost the flow but generally not bad at all
__________________
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-24-04, 03:34 PM   #8
Krackmittens
Light Weight
 
Krackmittens's Avatar
 
Posts: 343
Joined: Jun 2003
Status: Offline
IP: C1DA C961

pretty good shit flow was a lil hit and miss but over all tight shit
Send a message via AIM to Krackmittens   Reply With Quote
Old 01-25-04, 12:11 AM   #9
Menik
Word.
 
Menik's Avatar
 
Posts: 2,017
Joined: Aug 2003
From: Mifflinburg, PA
Status: Offline
IP: DD10 0DFF

Yeah this was alright here man....you had some good emotion in there....the flow in this was alright, it stayed on point through out the piece....sturcture in this was alright....probably could use some multies though....but keep at it.
Send a message via AIM to Menik Send a message via MSN to Menik   Reply With Quote
Old 01-25-04, 02:25 AM   #10
Tommy the 45
Guest
 
Posts: n/a
Joined:
Status:
Text Record: 0-1
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 4CEF 0D91

Thanks...
  Reply With Quote
Old 01-26-04, 08:53 AM   #11
Tommy the 45
Guest
 
Posts: n/a
Joined:
Status:
Text Record: 0-1
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 4CEF 0D91

I did a second verse to this as well


Raised in an unstable family since they cut my cable/
from my navel, unable to give me the love your parents gave you.
Labeled the black sheep, since I tapped feet on earth I was trapped deep/
every single one of my songs you can consider a facts sheet.
16 years later, none the greater getting dirty paper/
mom's a stranger can't communicate...need a translator.
Still don't hate her...no woman is stronger than my mom/
who else can say for 16 years long they raised Tom.
Nobody, there's no price for that no money/
is better than my mommy but feel like you don't love me.
No more love in your cooking, at the dinner table just looking/
judging me and staring, you know you brought a crook in.
I use to be your little star eyed boy always with a smile/
reality catched up and changed my style.
All you ever do is complain point the finger and blame/
I'm sorry I'm such a shame 'cos we can never go back again.
Though you try to patch the sorrow it won't be better tomorow/
hopeless, genes consists of a vodka bottles and blue malboro's.
Thanks to dad,I'm not blaming him this is my life/
mom can't guide me forever I got my own sight.
I love you but now we only speak when we argue/
You say things like you don't want to get along, but I do.
Sorry for everything, if I could I'd find the oinment/
take away the poignant pain I've brought from dissapointment.
  Reply With Quote
Reply


Thread Tools Search this Thread
Search this Thread:

Advanced Search
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump



All times are GMT -4. The time now is 03:03 AM.

Powered by vBulletin.
Copyright © 2000-2004 Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.