One thing first, quotation marks are put in to distinguish thoughts and statements...

*Pussy cat exits the projects in pained tears..enter a nigga...*


Nigga:"erupting torrent of torrential pain disdain clouding my judgement in arrousing rain"~
"the thunder bolts erupt in my heartbeat my heart she's crying under the pounding rain"~
PC:"Nigga let me be my tears hide my character feel the fear.."~
Nigga:"I hear my dear but let a nigga hold your head till what u hear is clear"~
PC:My hearing is crystal nigga just let me be; N:"Mama i cant react violently"~
PC:"Yeh u right no fighting your rage so i respnd silently"~
N:"So be silent P take my hand" ;P: "I wont";N: take my palm;P:"I cant"
N:"Well dammit girl come out of this stormy weather and lets forget our rants"~
N:But how can i forget is it my own mind or tear drops alone that stain my sight?
P:"Nigga leave me in my pain and fright i'm slain in plight I'll fade in this rain tonight"~
N:"Mama can i hold you?";*hesitation* P:"I cant respond to you"
N:"Mama let my mind mold you"*hesitation* P:"the love is corresponding boo"~
N:"So love me in this rain love me in your pain is not my love plain?"~
P:His game is up there i wish i were above this bullshit, above the rain~
N:"Why dont u answer girl speak your heart let your mind not tell the truest"~
P:"If only the complex simplicity didnt limit me to the feeling that makes me bluest"~
N:My pussy cat sits in this stormy night why cant she love her king~
P:Nigga speak your mind im beggining to shiver at the fact i own this ring~
N:"Does honesty betray you my love most high verbalize your incorrect sin"~
P:"I thought love was a blessin but i've indeed bertrayed you king give me correction"~
N:Give me the tray duece or the caliber, a 22 or excalibur she deserves nothing in this pain im mad at her
P:Let him hit me like my father aint let him strike like my brother aint ~
P:add to this pouring rain another pain~
P:My black men so use to not standing strong~
P:in this moisture he'll fold and i 'll return to my unda cover friend in this disbanding song~

*Nigga sheds a tear*
N:"Mama come to my heart, let your hand enter mine at this time"~
P:"Nigga did u hear me?";N:"Clearly u need time not a nine"~
Nont want my pussy cat red and shit except for periods the weather hits "Sometimes i wonder if the president is predjudice"
P:"Can you repeat?";N: Cause if he is thats 4 years spent fighting oppurtunity immunity for a lighter shade i taste plight in my community"~
P:"Why do u stray from the task at hand beat me if you please but i weep from this righteous form"~
*Silence from the nigga, then a single gun shot, PC walks toward Nigga and makes love to him*
p:"With your silence encouraging this rain water i make love to you quiet storm"~
*Pussy cat enters the projects and packs her things without crying, as she exits the building and hails a taxi her love lies buried in her memories as she sets sights at a place with less rain...she moves in with her mother in Seattle as the rain washes away the Nigga...*
Newscaster:"It was very of stormy last night but unusually quiet so you may not have heard (chuckles) Todays forecast however is bright and sunny..."

1luv.

you know that, I think that's actually pretty good... too much to take in right at the moment, I'd have to study it more closely. some of the rhymes at first don't seem to make sense, until you come back and look at them again. I liked the ending. :-)

^Thanks, it took me but a minute but i like the results, elevation is key, 1luv.

whoa, confusing... making it all the more mysterious

innovative concept! not bad at all

Aight thanks for the reply i just want to know if any titan feels eqipped enough to battle this tangled web of words, elevation is key, 1luv.

i hate naptime, 1luv.

Wow, i really liked that, i must say
creativity and the whole set up was up there
you took a different route, it was a little bit confusing at some parts but not as much to throw the piece off
real nice read
keep elevatin

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^Thanks for the feedback finally, elevation is key, 1luv.