Keep my garage buffed but I dodge stuff large enough
To crush my Lex, rush to sex as she blush complex its rough
To keep a girl, streets I hurl kisses at their lips and chew snuff
Want action and condition satisfaction is ammunition handcuffed
Not good it automatic causes static “so girl I love your powder puff�
You a fiery soul entirely controlled by love you have great cake
Sweet heart I’m awake to take a unique part in your wet lake�
“MADD you such an act all way touch the fact about us
Having sex got me grabbing kotex your clout I can’t trust
Shook so I look into my unconscious mind to find you boo
Just expression and sex aggression toward making me bed happy�
“Aw girl you grow hot like a robot party improvement leads to snappy
Body movements see nice device on your lip-gloss your hips boss
Brown and oh so round wanna go down town lick quick and toss
Tongue get you wet, lost and sprung girl come up off some please�
“MADD I’m queen planner you have a cream banana but you sneeze
In a routine manner wanna cum squeeze my waist so free and taste
The wonder desert under my skirt while I thunder and flirt butt lace
Is the place lets face it, you could be like PEE WEE HERMAN
So predetermine to ride a fancy bike then get lost like Mark Furman�

I like you Rhyme Scheme but i dont quite understand why any of this has got t do with anything? You chatting about s hoe nucca?? or sex.. please fill me in.

oh BTW

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Thats the whole point of this this way you will get feedback.

Your title is tooo longdawg dont explain what this about ill just pretend ya freeing k?

Keep my garage buffed but I dodge stuff large enough
To crush my Lex, rush to sex as she blush complex its rough
aha i like your multi's ^ this got me going
To keep a girl, streets I hurl kisses at their lips and chew snuff
Want action and condition satisfaction is ammunition handcuffed
good vocab but ammuntion handcuffed that aint making much sense nucca
Not good it automatic causes static “so girl I love your powder puff�
You a fiery soul entirely controlled by love you have great cake
Sweet heart I’m awake to take a unique part in your wet lake�
again good wordplay displayed but what are you talking about a girl or a gun you kep changing
“MADD you such an act all way touch the fact about us
Having sex got me grabbing kotex your clout I can’t trust
a bit weak here... too much sex lines
Shook so I look into my unconscious mind to find you boo
Just expression and sex aggression toward making me bed happy�
“Aw girl you grow hot like a robot party improvement leads to snappy
Body movements see nice device on your lip-gloss your hips boss
Brown and oh so round wanna go down town lick quick and toss
Tongue get you wet, lost and sprung girl come up off some please�
“MADD I’m queen planner you have a cream banana but you sneeze
In a routine manner wanna cum squeeze my waist so free and taste
The wonder desert under my skirt while I thunder and flirt butt lace
Is the place lets face it, you could be like PEE WEE HERMAN
So predetermine to ride a fancy bike then get lost like Mark Furman


And so on this poetry containd nie vocab and rhyme scheme but it made no sense you were talking alot of different htings which lowered the score to 6.77/10

when you make an open mic

make a name.. about two words

like... The hood
or Great Sex

Then you write all about it... i made a cypher in cypher forum about stuff like that that may help you do that sort of stuff..

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thanks for the props hey look a fourth grader read this and understood so some cats be fooling themselves not fooling me at all

ight the first guy that posted this open mic was pretty good this is what i give him
flow: 4/10
wordplay: 8/10
punches: 5/10
overall: 6 1/2