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09-30-05, 09:46 PM | #1 | ||||||
Flyweight
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freestyle
IP: 2B10 C5A0
tae- just added tha lor
i dont gotta prove shit when i spit barz cause these niggaz get lost in my flo like a trip 2 marz i buss arz im on tha top of tha chart and i aint lookin 4 no beef so haters dont start i buss these niggaz headz on wallz fuk virgin mobile they can drop tha calls i stay pack wit heat like tha people get jammed in mallz thats a waste of time bitch niggaz dont hate on mine polish me up itz tay time 2 shine i hope yall feelin this i did this quik it waz a little sample feedback please |
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09-30-05, 11:24 PM | #2 | |||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 28AD 5545
umm hey you wanna battle? ill set it up just messages Big_O
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10-01-05, 12:36 AM | #3 | ||||
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IP: 31C2 62EB
Drop two link to two OM'S you have left decen feedback on
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10-01-05, 06:04 PM | #4 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 2B10 C5A0
say it in english ^^^ and i dont have 20 posts yet..............
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10-01-05, 06:05 PM | #5 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 2B10 C5A0
yall like my gangsta rapper in tha corner????????????
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10-02-05, 08:58 PM | #6 | ||||||
New to RV
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IP: 3F7D ED7B
Vocabulary: Work on it
Flow: okay Structure: Work on it Concept: Work on it Topic: Work on it Favorite Lines: Nothing Rating: 4/10 Advice: This is bad even for a freestyle. No originality, nothing sticks out , nothing quotable, you had no good wordplay and your punches were lacking, as was your vocabulary. Elevate.
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10-03-05, 06:37 AM | #7 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 2B10 C5A0
thanks 4 tha props and i will step my game up..........
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10-03-05, 08:20 AM | #8 | |||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 9E82 E784
def elivate... this one didnt stick out too me either.
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10-03-05, 06:59 PM | #9 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 2B10 C5A0
ok buddy...............................
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10-03-05, 07:51 PM | #10 | ||||
pain is weakness leaving the body
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IP: EE58 AEAE
let's see...........
flow- okay, but shaky at times..... structure-n/a topic- basic self-glorification, which iz ok for a free, but u didn't do anything with it........ fav. lines: none really stuck out......... overall 2/10: srry bout the low grade, but this needs elevation on more than one level...... try to work on a topic, then up your vocab....... an OM isn't all about punches, but for a battle you're gonna have to step your game up........
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10-03-05, 08:34 PM | #11 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 2B10 C5A0
ok.....................
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10-08-05, 08:58 PM | #12 | ||||||
Flyweight
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IP: 2B10 C5A0
it waz okay but imma have a new open mic called b-i-t-c-h-e-s
look out 4 that shit
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10-08-05, 11:26 PM | #13 | |||
The Rise
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IP: 24BB 344D
,Bad structure,the flow was ok,Punches that standedd out"none",Vocab wasnt good,the smilie faces need to be takin out...and i dont like these concepts for OMs...not original.
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10-09-05, 02:04 PM | #14 | ||||||
Coming to Kill you All
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IP: AE86 9ECC
man...you need work.First off....actually TRY and make shit flow.U were fucking basic.Don't make one line so long then the one after soooo short.Cause then it sounds fucked up.And as for ur content...well...I don't even wanna talk about that
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10-11-05, 03:43 PM | #15 | |||||||
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IP: E3CA 7CA2
yea your horible ever thought off quitting it would help your career
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