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09-29-05, 03:14 AM | #1 | |||
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FEATURED TRACK: Just Change .....HotNesss
IP: AE4B 5F78
I did this awhile back...i heard the beat when i heard Cali's version but anyways i thought i could do better so here it is...its about me word
i left feed on http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=209951 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=209218 Its called "Just Change" its a very emotional song www.soundclick.com/enstinctz its about the 4th track down Last edited by ECKO : 09-29-05 at 03:19 AM. |
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09-29-05, 07:44 PM | #2 | ||||||
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were you on blazen battles a while back ? ...
Anyway ... str8 track man ... if it is you ... and i think it is ... cuz i remember your style ... but yea ... im feelin this good ish man ! ... Peace !! ~1~ |
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09-30-05, 04:43 AM | #3 | |||
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IP: 1ADC A69C
beats like this one can cause you to flow really choppy...it's almost a bouncy type of syncopation...and when you flow to it, it needs to be continuous to counter the choppy nature of the beat...for the most part, you accomplished this
I like how your delivery/emotion built up to a climax (hehee) and your quality is pretty good...def. improve from this point last year personal sounding lyrics good track where's da hook? 1 |
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09-30-05, 06:30 AM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: 3F99 4C5F
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OMFG YOU'RE SO FUCKIN GAY! Anyway... the beat is dope to me. I like the piano and shit... ya delivery was on point, especially during he hook. you could've added just a TAD BIT more depth to your voice during the verse though, nahsayen? like, at some points, make your voice kind of high pitched and at others, a low pitched etc etc. you know, just add some variety, but no too much. thats how rappers become "animated" speakin of the hook, it's aiigh, Im not gonna say its wack, Im just not feelin the "JUST CHANGE!" Maybe if I was in a different mood. the lyrics was decent, but your flow was a little off at some points too. I liked your rhyme scheme though, I hate boring rhyme schemes that just rhyme a word 1 or 2 times. you sound familar. Like a main stream artist, im leaning towards Capone...but its all good keep doin what you do, maybe we could collab one day.. PZ
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09-30-05, 08:12 PM | #5 | |||
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IP: AE4B 5F78
upppin thanks for the feed remember to leave links so i can return the favor
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10-09-05, 02:44 PM | #6 | |||
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IP: 6410 3915
upppppppinnnnnnnn
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10-09-05, 08:08 PM | #7 | |||||
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This is not valid feedback. - Ape. Last edited by Apexx : 10-09-05 at 10:30 PM. |
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10-10-05, 11:14 PM | #8 | |||
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IP: 6410 3915
.......................................dont sleep
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10-29-05, 05:21 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: DB06 0223
dope ass beat, your flow is nice. good emotion.
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10-31-05, 09:07 AM | #10 | ||||
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IP: C11A 6193
Beat is dope without a doubt, always liked it...
Your flow was on point on most spots, maybe here and there bit less but props for your flow because this beat ain't the easiest one to spit on consistently in fact. The lyrics were definitely on point, I liked your overall style on this song. Delivery was there, you got that down for sure. Hook was a good add-on to the song in fact, it kept playing in my mind. Rather catchy but not in an overly commercial way though. Props (feedback to learn rankings in RG)
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11-01-05, 07:34 PM | #11 | |||||||
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IP: 5350 A834
koo beat. good emotion. n yo quality iz good. good flow fo this beat. sounds liek a conious song. nice shit mang, werd
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11-01-05, 10:29 PM | #12 | |||||||
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IP: 413F 9EC8
im deff lovin this track....
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11-06-05, 05:26 PM | #13 | ||||
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beat not my favorite but its not horrible by anymeans
flow was off in a few spots not bad at all here really ive heard much worse lol lyrics i thought they were pretty good personal shit i liked it so props on that emotion i think this is where you shined your emotion was really good throughout and got even better towards the end so props for stats
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