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Old 12-27-04, 11:55 PM   #1
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my take on life is basic.. different day same shit
facin sterotypes of racist self proclaim patriots..
tryin to stay morally sacred im overwhelmed with blatant hatred..
what is reverse discrimination.. if ya nation has no pigmentation..
the penetration of my knowlege can rejuvenate the brainless..
they sit back and push pawns, but claim that there blameless..
i watch the envy spurn in them,
am i a revolutionary, naw i just dont take hits
without returnin them
poloticians promises us shit, when there heart is far from it,
just to get ya vote,and go against every thing that got them in
yo the problem is,theres to much hope in the creation,
and less in the creator, for the perfect president we waitin
,while God is forsaken,
more or less i plan to bless every body within my vicinity,
almost 500 years,and we still aint free
so u can catch me shakin my fist at the statue of liberty
cursin this perverse country,practicin my freedom speech
suddenly awaken from dreams of takin tha mark, that 666
gotme wonderin... we aint robots,so y they tryin to put microchips
in our wrist
ignorance is bliss so america must be heaven
ill feed u bread thats unleaven.. im questionin
the decsions to war and wreck countries
then they turn around give them our tax money
then when there economy rises,the money doubles back
but that part dont make the news,we dont see none of that
NO more united state welcome folks to the new age rome
im just tryinto get my life right ,before tha antichrist takes his throne
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Old 12-28-04, 12:22 AM   #2
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str8 shit but keep it up yo.
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Old 12-28-04, 12:24 AM   #3
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thanx my nigga stay up
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Old 12-28-04, 10:42 AM   #4
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uppin...4
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feedback!
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Old 01-03-05, 11:46 AM   #5
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uppin..........4..................
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Yo prophecy you did your thing hommie i give it a 10/10
because i actually read the whole thing,,an you got nice punches
an the word play doing big things too,,,,
yo i cant hate on you,,,,,nice drop 1


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Damn yo that shit was ruff it was captivating
good story telling skills keep it up
that shit was a 10/10
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Old 01-03-05, 02:30 PM   #6
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This poem was pretty good, nice flow and content here, i liked the vocab you used,it really captured your point welll, keep it up man, good to see more people posting poems..pc
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Old 01-03-05, 08:15 PM   #7
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thanx ...............just trying to build up a reap around here..................
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Quote:
Originally Posted by 5MICMEDALLION
Yo prophecy you did your thing hommie i give it a 10/10
because i actually read the whole thing,,an you got nice punches
an the word play doing big things too,,,,
yo i cant hate on you,,,,,nice drop 1


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Damn yo that shit was ruff it was captivating
good story telling skills keep it up
that shit was a 10/10
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Old 01-05-05, 10:46 AM   #8
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nice drop on this. it had good flow, vocab and the content was good 2. keep doin you kidd. return the favor. pc
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Old 01-05-05, 12:05 PM   #9
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thanx for the feedback my man good looks
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Quote:
Originally Posted by 5MICMEDALLION
Yo prophecy you did your thing hommie i give it a 10/10
because i actually read the whole thing,,an you got nice punches
an the word play doing big things too,,,,
yo i cant hate on you,,,,,nice drop 1


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Damn yo that shit was ruff it was captivating
good story telling skills keep it up
that shit was a 10/10
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Old 01-05-05, 10:16 PM   #10
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flow was consistent, vocab was hot
good overall, keep it up
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Old 01-05-05, 11:13 PM   #11
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thanx for the feed back man just tryin to establish
my self as one of the top lyricist onhere ya know just tired of
fake ass lyricist with there simple rhyme
yo check my open mic when insanity please
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Quote:
Originally Posted by 5MICMEDALLION
Yo prophecy you did your thing hommie i give it a 10/10
because i actually read the whole thing,,an you got nice punches
an the word play doing big things too,,,,
yo i cant hate on you,,,,,nice drop 1


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Originally Posted by NarKotic
Damn yo that shit was ruff it was captivating
good story telling skills keep it up
that shit was a 10/10
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