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04-20-07, 01:28 PM | #1 | |||||
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I'm Fly High (Jim Jones Diss) will rtf
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www.myspace.com/paranoidxl
or www.soundclick.com/paranoidcan berses and hooks by Paranoid. i kinda rushed the recording of the hook but meh, its alright. let me know what yall think http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=241285 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3161092
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04-20-07, 01:37 PM | #3 | |||||
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^it's for fun duke, any dumbass would notice that.
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04-20-07, 01:49 PM | #4 | ||||||||
Pushin it....
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your hook was HORRIBLE...
BALLIN!!!! lyrics were dope, but yeah...your hook was shit....good try tho
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04-20-07, 02:13 PM | #5 | |||||||
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pros________
beats siight..... quality is not bad... mixed nice..... cons_______ ur lyrics r pretty basic....basicaly wack.... u got no rythum man....ur on some beasty boys w less swagger shit hook is ass bro... "bitch go cry..oh my" lol..... "im so hot u be burnin in my heat..." LOL..... man....ur garbo dude...im sorry u need to step ur lyrical game up immediately "his friends know he's fatter then santa claus ??? AHAHAHAH
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04-20-07, 05:16 PM | #6 | ||||||
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before first verse ended i was already bored of the repitive flow...regarding the punches, nothing really stood out..alot of it sounded played out. Lyrics lackin creativity, nothing too memorable.
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04-20-07, 05:21 PM | #7 | |||||||
I'm Talented.Period.
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well
ur delivery and aggression onthe track are nice other than that, it wasn't all that... If you're gonna diss an industry cat with their own beat, you gotta be at least better than they are. 1 |
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04-20-07, 06:07 PM | #8 | |||||||
Broke as hell
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i listened to a bit of this earlier today......the quality is pretty good....don't need any real help there...lyrics could be upped a little bit for a diss...especially to someone laced up in the game like jimmy.....ummmm the thing that really stood out that needs to be fixed is the "BALLIN" part.....sounds to....iono....not right.....
other then that..its all good in the hood
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04-20-07, 06:32 PM | #9 | |||||
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haha thanks for the feed. i know my lines basic, I'm tryina work on it.
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04-24-07, 02:25 PM | #10 | |||
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BALLA!!!!!!lol this was ight ur flow needs to be smoother u gotta aabbaa rhymescheme .....i was watin to hear a jim jones flow.....but u came witta SIMPLER FLOW.....hook is kinda garbo u shoulda did sumthing different overall this was ight u stay up rtf its real shit
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04-24-07, 06:14 PM | #11 | ||||||||
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lmao exactly. the fuck you think son? hahaha
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04-24-07, 09:04 PM | #12 | |||||
scotia's finest
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wow.....................................dont diss anyoneever again please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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04-25-07, 04:10 PM | #13 | |||
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step it up..
you have no kinda swag at all..your whole flow is too robotic and it sounds like youre worrying too much about ending each line on that last snare.. ..lyrically it was below average.. |
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05-10-07, 06:04 PM | #14 | |||||||
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Check your downloads on soundclcik i DL hella of your songs to listen to just to see what you got hit me up on myspace.com/westcoast916 so far i'm likin what i hear so if you wana collab hit me up
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05-10-07, 06:20 PM | #15 | |||||||
Nt Your Average
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you upped ya levels madd since i heard you, dont sound robotic nymore, quality is shit though...dnno why ppl sayin its good...lines are basic like they said, but flows on point, need a lil more polishin still a lil choppy but u gettin there breh...deliverys good imo...sounds kinda agressive, keep up.
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