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10-20-03, 02:31 PM | #1 | ||||||
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We Tired **ft Masta C**
IP: 9E86 791A
AYo C you know what i'm tired of
C: what syn: this kids dickrydin C: yeah i hear that i'm gettin tired of alotta things SYN: no doubt well speak ya mind holmes hook so you think you had us mad but you didn't have a chance syn spits to the fullest and C empties clips from gats i'm tired of this BULLShit you kids are at half step watch what comes from ya lips cause SYN a C are gettin HECTIc SYNTEXT I'm tired of dickryders slappin swords(dicks) with they buddies givem props when they lost BIG~/~ tired of kids with 100 posts smackin lips when the matter of fact in spittin they only BARK cause the can't SHAKE a stick~/~ time to SHIT-A-Brick cause you kids are slippin THROW like unCatchable balls from anthony MASON look what ya face with a PM a sentance so pathetic you gotta MEssege people to beat who ya FACIN~/~ aight: i smack at a played like cracked out trying to walk without a spine i knew you ain't got the ass TO BACK IT UP~/~ your last to step up when i smack kids and give them BROWN STREAKS cause they ain't got game AYE CHUCK~/~ so you think you had us mad but you didn't have a chance syn spits to the fullest and C empties clips from gats i'm tired of this BULLShit you kids are at half step watch what comes from ya lips cause SYN a C are gettin HECTIc C Im tired of being PM’d to battle, to afraid to say it in bitch-slapped… Named B-Kast, going against me you see-mass destruction cause this dicks-wack… Constantly Talk-n-trash, as soon as I step up they be walk-n-back, like a abused dawg.. They just yappen-their-jaws, and in front lines they be rappen-all-soft, cause they all talk.. Theres just to many quitters, and less big hitters, its like the little leagues-here… You all just whine-n-rattle, step up to the line-of-battle, and ya all bleed-fear.. Tired of seeing fake-shit, and people that cant make-it, cause its out-of-hand… I will hit-you-hard, cause I spit-to-scar ,And my hits Im about-to-land Too many people bluffing, bringing nothing, it just makes-ya-border Cause they all just fronting, soon to be a failure saying “may I take-ya-order”… hook x2 so you think you had us mad but you didn't have a chance syn spits to the fullest and C empties clips from gats i'm tired of this BULLShit you kids are at half step watch what comes from ya lips cause SYN a C are gettin HECTIc ______________________________________ we need feed back |
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10-20-03, 03:27 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 9C1E 2B43
Yeah leave us some feedback on this if you check it out, its much appreciated, thanks.
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10-20-03, 03:34 PM | #3 | ||||||
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this piecce was pretty ill, nice vocab, structure was good on both parts, good story, multis were better from syntext but both verses were ill, it was well laid out, all in all this piece was ill,keep droppin tha hotness, and check out tha second part to my unfinished piece.~1~
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10-20-03, 03:43 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 399E F0FD
no doubt ....this gotta be illnes lol but thatnks for the feedback and props....and we need more feedback
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10-20-03, 05:18 PM | #5 | |||||||
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yeah, thought this was a tight drop, the hook was ok, and the whole thing had good flow, i thought C's verse had a slightly better structure though, but both had some good use of multis and decent subject.....keep the shit droppin, peace to both.....
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10-20-03, 05:28 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: 399E F0FD
uppin for crits thank patna
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10-20-03, 06:05 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: E655 47CD
ya this shit was dope nice flow and shit. really fukkin tight rhymes i like this piece quite a bit. good work.
hit this up w/ a vote if you could thanx. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4674#post854674 |
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10-20-03, 07:08 PM | #8 | ||||||
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I agree that this was a pretty ill piece, good content and structure and the worplay was good and there was some good vocab, syntext I think had the better of the multi's here but I think I was feelin Masta's flow a bit more. keep droppin peeps.
check out mine and masta C's collab called "Disguised by Death" I'll be posting it very shortly. plz and thanx in advance.
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10-20-03, 08:56 PM | #9 | ||||
Word.
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IP: 9C1E 2B43
Hey thanks for the feedback, keep it coming, its much appreciated, thanks.
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10-20-03, 09:11 PM | #10 | |||
Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
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IP: 238E AB70
aight...this was nicely done
syn, as always you impress me with how good you actually are.. masta... damn kid your getting better each drop, trust me overall this was good, flow was on, mulits were there and all the topic was good, but syn knows this was just a copy of my topic..LOL kidding...you guys did good |
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10-20-03, 10:36 PM | #11 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
yo thanks alot realist....nice crits uppin for more of those
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10-21-03, 02:05 AM | #12 | ||||||
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DAMN.... thats WERD...... I felt everything y'all were saying in there..... it's wierd b\c I just typed up an Open Mic about how fucked up RB is...... this was nice.... but Syntext... shorten up ur lines.... it'll make it look better... and helps keep flow consistant
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10-21-03, 02:30 AM | #13 | ||||||
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IP: C1DA C961
NO DOUBT CRIT IS IS NOTED HOLMES I'LL WORK ON THAT NICE CRITS KEEP THEM COMING
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10-21-03, 12:37 PM | #14 | ||||||
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IP: 399E F0FD
ayooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo uppin on this
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10-21-03, 03:03 PM | #15 | ||||
Word.
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Hey thanks for the feedback so far, keep it coming, its much appreciated, thanks.
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