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Old 11-04-03, 08:40 PM   #1
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cleanin up

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people say its pretty easy to talk shit to me
i'm the cat in the yard, you the dog tied to the tree
but where im from, my eyes are clear
you don' know cus you aint here
i can see you hate me
but you cant rate me
cus these chucks aint filled with nothing but me
not the chick youre roughin nuh uh, its me
and i didn't come here to start any shit
i came here to tell you i am part of it
and im fully equipped and not with just text
i got a rag in my hand and in the other windex
so open your eyes, ready set
your filthy mind's bout to get wet
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Old 11-05-03, 12:20 AM   #2
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Good drop. Rhyme scheme is good along with the structure. Lots of emotion put into this, mainly hate. Basically, my interpretation of this is that you are just sick of ppl judgin u when they dont even kno u. N' if ppl want to test u, u'll hit back twice as hard. Kinda like u can back yo shit up. Am I close? lol. Overall, good job, n keep droppin. much respect.
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Old 11-05-03, 01:13 AM   #3
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exactly

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Thanks for the encouragement, I'm pretty new to this. That's exactly what I wanted to say though. I'll have to check your shit out, it's prolly way better than mine haha.

thx-- catzzzzzz
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Old 11-05-03, 05:26 PM   #4
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Yay! I got it right. Fun and games. I agree totally with what u wrote, and is kina like the same shit i go off of in life. U got a gift keep it up. Much respect. Btw, just cuz ive been here a lil longer, dun mean my stuff is better. All got our own preferences. I've just been writin for a while. My guys convinced me to come in here. I'm glad I did too. Keep postin.
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Old 11-05-03, 06:17 PM   #5
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its a pretty basic, alot used topic, that just about everyone can relate too, almost everyone feels looked down upon by some ppl once in a while.

its a good topic, if you can give it something else, add on to what else is always said and make ppl think. to make a used topic unique and have a new flavor. give it your own touches. It has some of its own, but i think you could still branch out more, put more unique thought in it.

the structure was alright, and the flow was pretty good. emotion was ok, could feel hate.

keep posting!!!

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DONT HATE

PS dont let ppl get you down, what the hell do they know about you right!?
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Old 11-05-03, 06:21 PM   #6
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I'll keep werkin on it, i just wanted to put sumthin up, ya know? Thx for the support!! And the comments!
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