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11-04-03, 08:40 PM | #1 | ||||||
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cleanin up
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people say its pretty easy to talk shit to me
i'm the cat in the yard, you the dog tied to the tree but where im from, my eyes are clear you don' know cus you aint here i can see you hate me but you cant rate me cus these chucks aint filled with nothing but me not the chick youre roughin nuh uh, its me and i didn't come here to start any shit i came here to tell you i am part of it and im fully equipped and not with just text i got a rag in my hand and in the other windex so open your eyes, ready set your filthy mind's bout to get wet |
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11-05-03, 12:20 AM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: 4577 CD9A
Good drop. Rhyme scheme is good along with the structure. Lots of emotion put into this, mainly hate. Basically, my interpretation of this is that you are just sick of ppl judgin u when they dont even kno u. N' if ppl want to test u, u'll hit back twice as hard. Kinda like u can back yo shit up. Am I close? lol. Overall, good job, n keep droppin. much respect.
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11-05-03, 01:13 AM | #3 | ||||||
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exactly
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Thanks for the encouragement, I'm pretty new to this. That's exactly what I wanted to say though. I'll have to check your shit out, it's prolly way better than mine haha.
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11-05-03, 05:26 PM | #4 | ||||||
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Yay! I got it right. Fun and games. I agree totally with what u wrote, and is kina like the same shit i go off of in life. U got a gift keep it up. Much respect. Btw, just cuz ive been here a lil longer, dun mean my stuff is better. All got our own preferences. I've just been writin for a while. My guys convinced me to come in here. I'm glad I did too. Keep postin.
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11-05-03, 06:17 PM | #5 | |||||||
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its a pretty basic, alot used topic, that just about everyone can relate too, almost everyone feels looked down upon by some ppl once in a while.
its a good topic, if you can give it something else, add on to what else is always said and make ppl think. to make a used topic unique and have a new flavor. give it your own touches. It has some of its own, but i think you could still branch out more, put more unique thought in it. the structure was alright, and the flow was pretty good. emotion was ok, could feel hate. keep posting!!! ~Tera~ DONT HATE PS dont let ppl get you down, what the hell do they know about you right!?
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11-05-03, 06:21 PM | #6 | ||||||
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I'll keep werkin on it, i just wanted to put sumthin up, ya know? Thx for the support!! And the comments!
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