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Old 08-08-04, 06:30 AM   #1
Klassic
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"Back Bite" i need da critics

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ma first drop, be cruel be true i need da critics

ive been disrespected all ma life cuz im white and im poor
when im in da club bitches wanna push me out the door
well now its teh time to kill tha score
any fuckers touch me goin straight to the floor
they say cuz im white i cant rhyme
since when light skinned rapper is a crime
groupies dont hang with me too
when they hear ma name they say WHO?
Guess what bitches times are done changed
ladder of royalty done rearanged
now taht ivve sold bunch of keys
ive done earn plenty G's
Now aint no problem hittin the mics
im up dere every night neliverin bites
each eve you hear mother fuckas get trashed
guess what homeboy your dreams have been crashed
i aint frontin i aint tryin to be eminem
each night i come home who i am
hoes now know $ to tha L to tha X
We now in tha back havin sex
I know i aint only on the block
Pay respect to the ones with a vess and the glock
holdin one maself in case "homie what...."
Beef gets hot ill pop one on the spot
never forget ma homeboys they're wit me
respect everyone who respects me

I'm out
Back soon wit more postings
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Old 08-08-04, 06:47 AM   #2
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hm... since you were aksing for it i'll be totally honest: the subject is really played, the structure was way off and the lines were very simple. try working on your flow and wordplay and be more creative with what you write. peace!
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Old 08-08-04, 04:09 PM   #3
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thanks man ill c on ma flow words and topics peace.
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