ten till midnight i stay up to da morning light/
extrodinare precission, i'm in love with the mic/
i lay any m.c down to sleep with bed time story, tuct in tight/
i be stallone, cliffhangin my way to enormous heights/
reality bites as anotha life dies in the worlds eyes/
no one feels the true grips of death as it changes tides/
no free rides to the next oasis, photosynthesis is da basis/
of this rotten existance as we face it on day by day, cant erase it/
cases of major porportions come washed away by da ocean/
love aint an emotion, its just anotha potion, spreadin erotion/
little by little we cease to exist in this planet takes it motion/
round a revolution dat cant be stopped, keep on pushin/
to the next level, soft like cushion we meddle da intrusion/
why do we keep on loosing grip of this time so confusing/
cant let it glide like a you be cruisin on a sunny day so amusin/
its a world full of sad faces that cant find reason/
so i end the flow teasin and skippin to da last season/
so cold in this winter cant find the child in me dat has been missn/

you need to leave three links........liked the opener....flow was ok for the most.....the topic was a bit choppy....drifted off in places.....but it was ok...nuthin special...but...yeah.....pZ

Ok nice complexity an' vocab but ya need to clean it up a bit remove the rough edges some of it sounded forced:

no free rides to the next oasis, photosynthesis is da basis/
of this rotten existance as we face it on day by day, cant erase it

That's an example of a bar it would have been better without

Flow was fine multis were lackin' as was an' overall focus but it was aight keep elevatin'

It was aight. It wasn't the best shit, but it had some nice vocab. You need to spend more time on it and even it out a little bit.

You need to leave 3 links or 3 names of people you left feedback to or this will get closed, Thanks.