This is just a song that i'm workin on, tell me what u think and where I can improve.

[chorus]
One moment to live, or break down and cry/
One moment to win or fall over and die/
Tears flowin like the rain, joy so far away/
One moment will decide my life today/


One moment more was needed by Eazy-E/
To think about if dat g, Might of have HIV/
One moment more was all tupac needed/
To save himself from the clip that was bein depleted/
In a moment Dr. King set a new world order/
Less racism for blacks but big targets for reporters/
He divided the borders, between the white n the brown/
But we styll main suspects every crime in town/
The moment we lost L, rap started 2 sink/
Mase became a pastor and cams rockin pink/
One moment more, we need Wallace in our lives/
too many wannabe thugs r screamin ryde or die
how can I survive, while looking for my one moment/
when my talent will b challenged and I get 2 expose it/
2004…my year to blow, will I glow/
or freeze in the darkness and die from the snow/

[chorus]

One moment ago, I was spittin simple rhymes/
Then I elevated, even maybelline was eyein my lines/
started 2 shyne, picked up multies n personals/
Now im rockin rocawear instead paint-stained overalls/
At one moment we were protected by God’s castle/
Now we under control by the atheist capitol/
Not livin by the supernatural but by the power of the dollar/
Many rather get rich or die tryin than drop for bein martyrs/
And fightin the good fight, all choosin answer 1 when #2 is the right/
God was our fright, so we chose to live in the night/
And destroyed the world by steppin into Lucifier’s light/


Thats all i have so far...will finish off 2nd verse and add 3rd later, just need an opinion on what I gots so far.