Ayo I'm gonna takeover lik Jay-Z & lik Jagged Edge I'll promise//
Came through wit my cru peeps been emotion lik Carl Thomas//
Like Missy Elliot wateva I spit verbally is not consdered a test//
Dimez want me 2 hollaback & I ain't even the F-a-b-o-l-o-u-s//
D- Chillz don't talk alotta bout the gunplay & packin a burner//
Yo shit is funny lik Michael Jackson gettin gutz 2 do a murder//
I got a flow tat hot lik fiya & I ain't even the late great Aaliyah//
Dudes droppin garbage posts tat are simply verbal diarea//
Rapper/Singer don't get it mistaken wit foolish & new reasons//
Yo flow wouldn't b sicker than me even if u spit durin flu season//
I c ya dues mad but I ain't mad at ya lik 2pac mine is vital//
Guess wat my flow is tough lik the judges on American Idol//
Methods r harsh I've sustain a reputation of bein a natural killer//
Who test me? my rhmyes r tighter than M.J. pantz in thriller//
U might lose 2 members by the end of the week man itz tragic//
Son u a battler?U da type 2 lose 19 in a row lik Orlando Magic//
Betta prepare 4 future probz with D- Chillz that u might handle//
Messin wit me is bad luck boy lik chillin in da Bermuda Triange//
Every1 on dis site want me 2 change up & use big words//
I do but ya can live on Sesame Street but u can't flip big birds//
Might run up catz wit batz leavin ya subtract wit da rock bottom//
Wherez yo gurl? Funny she stay closer 2 my dick than a condum//

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Yall Niggaz i put u to rest
with a whole in your chest
wanna take this test
battle me
ull see
with this gun i'll point
till u give me that joint
see my life it's the high life
all i need is the weed
plant that seed
in the forest
heres the chorus

Chest with a hole layin in the ground
final bound time to go next round

Yall wiggaz i c that ur secret to me
is listen to ac..dc
Hidin behind a tree
the only secrte to me is that u can't c
what i can see.
spittin like u rap
that spit is crap
this nigga bout to blow a whole in ur chest
(finish it wigger where the rest)
give ur spit a rest ur like a lil bitch
don't get my drift
ill give u a brain lift
if i gave ur rap a test
id find out that it had brests
thats what i mean by lil bitch
(this mutha fuckers a lil snitch)

I personnaly wasnt real fond of this piece. Humurous at times but very general(basic). As far as using bigger words,.....maybe it would add a little flavor to your punches and as far as bringing a battle like that to the battle forum, not to be a dick. But you should practice. From what Ive read on this site, Emcees are real heart felt in this game and aint afraid to rip someone apart with less skill. stay focused man. Use your metaphors as an advantage.

Yo Check This, Guy makin white jokes haha
You think your corny white jokes are tight/
Bitch put your fists up and lets fight/
Only thing you see is my glock point blank at yo neck/
Quick someone call a medic before I blow 12 holes in this bitches chest/
This guy claims to be all hard from the hood/
But when it comes down to it his rap game isint very damn good/
Son this is a battle between the best of the best/
And im puttin your ass to da test so why is yo ass in this game when all you want is fame/
Son get out while you can before yo ass is in the Rap Hall of Shame/
Man this guys just been rapped and the sex hasent even started yet/
Thats what happens when you take on one of the greats/
So muthafucka put down your mic and smile/
Cause you just got smoked by a wigga from 7 Mile/

I know its not long but yea.

I don't give a fuck I don' take this rap shit serious anyway

wtf