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Old 01-08-04, 11:16 PM   #1
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On The Edge (You Pushed Me) Part 1

IP: E38C 4580

You Fucking Did This To Me. . Why Couldn't You Just Let Me Live. . I Didn't Need To Hear The Constant Shit. . Fuck You Mother Fuckers. . Is That What You Want HUH?! IS THIS WHAT YOU FUCKING WANT?!

Dear Bullies. .
Are You Fuckin' Happy Now ? I'm On The Brink Of Exstinction
All Cause Ya'll Were Thinkin' I Wasn't Peakin', Hate I Wasn't Seekin
You Ain't Know My Cup Runneth Over, I Had The Summons Closer
And I Had To Run It Slower So Boulders Could Fall Off Of My Shoulders
But Ya'll Jus Had To Keep Fuckin' Pushin' Didn't You, I'm Sick Of You
Thinkin You Better Than Me As Individual, I Wish To Rid Of You
But I'm Not That Big A Fool, I'll Jus Release Myself From Earth Instead
You Ain't Worth Blood Shed, I'll Jus Become Dead, You Want This Right ?
You Seem To Flaunt Tight, But When You Walked At Night, Fright. .
Is All I Saw, You Fuckin' Fags, YOU Suffocate On The Plastic Wrappin'
Your Ass Attackin Me, Spaztic Snappin', You Tried To Rack Me Happy
But You Fuckin' Idiots Just Pushed Me, From Smile To Anger Quick
You In Danger Slick, Over Some Shameless Shit, Forget The Famous Tip
I'm Fuckin' Travis You Retards, And These Scars Are From Years Of
Supposed Peers Like You, Poppin' Off N Shit, Now I'm Near The Clear Above
FUCK YOU, I've Ducked Few, But Some Bullets I Just Wish Had Of Hit Me
I Want To Die After I'm Shot N Not Live Through Fuckin' Nine Like Fifty
Now You Ain't Gotta Get Me, I'm Lookin' At This Rope, Waitin' To Choke
Should I Die Fast Or Slow ? Lemme Know You Fucks, You Want Me To Go
YOU FUCKING MADE ME DO THIS, Don't Read This Clueless, Despair
Is What I've Been Through, Not Like You Care, But I Figured I'd Go Bare
Listen To Me You Fucking Pricks, I Don't Give A Fucking Shit About You
And Secretly, If Need Be, I Would Fucked Ya'll Up. . But I Never Clowned You
Or Fucking Hounded You, Told What You Could N Couldn't Do
I Wouldn't Hurt Another Person, I'll Be Considerate, Shouldn't You ?
Deliberate With Your Tyraids, As The Sky Fades, My Eyes Blazed
I Try To Gyrate Other Thoughts Than Your Fight Ways In My Last Days
I Couldn't Think Of One Fucking Positive, You Ruined My Life, Thanks
Russian Roulette, Cussin' While Sweat Rushes Down My Neck, Fired A Blank
That's Just One Bullet, Next Time I Pull It, My Brains Could Be Blown
My Pain Strewn Over My Home, Now The Outcasts Are Not Alone
Truthfully, I Wish One Of These Slugs Would Pierce Your Hatin' Veins
My Fate's Unchanged, You Take My Name -
N Write In Blood As I Escape The Pain, N Await My Train Of Death To Hustle
Rope Tightened, I'm Done Writing, My Wrists Are Slidin', I've Cut My Muscles
Thanks For All The Support You Gave, That's Just My Final Joke You Faggots
Here's The Gun I Played The Card Of Death With, Shoot Yourselves -
You Fucks Can Have It. .
With The Utmost Hatred,
Travis


You Said So Much, I Bled So Much. . . I Was The Edge, You Fucking Pushed Me
You Fed So Much, I'm Dead To Touch. . Go Ahead N Push Me
I'm On The Edge. . Push Me. . I Was On The Edge You Pushed Me . .
Now Pussies, I'm Dead, Look At Me. . As I Hang My Sorrows For You To See

Dear Family. .
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Old 01-08-04, 11:18 PM   #2
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Dear Family Will Be Part Two, Should Be Up Hopefully Soon. . This Is My First Time Doin Something Like This. . Two Verses In The Form Of Suicide Notes To Those Who Drove Me To The Point. . N No, This Are Not Real. . Jus An Idea I've Never Tried Before. . Pz.
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Old 01-09-04, 07:09 AM   #3
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nice concept.... thought you put the piont across well... maybe in places it cound hane been worded better...but most hit.... maybe the syllables count count have been revisedto nelp the flow,,, but it was on for most.... interesting read.... jus work on the overall feel of the verse.... but looking forward ot part 2....pZ...
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Old 01-09-04, 04:20 PM   #4
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Old 01-09-04, 09:17 PM   #5
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Yeah this was pretty good i thought....enjoyed it.....structure was good in this.....the flow in this was alright, it got off at some points in this, but it was still good enough to carry on in the piece.....you had some nice vocab in this....multies were good as well i thought...it made a good read...keep at it.
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