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01-08-04, 11:16 PM | #1 | |||||||
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On The Edge (You Pushed Me) Part 1
IP: E38C 4580
You Fucking Did This To Me. . Why Couldn't You Just Let Me Live. . I Didn't Need To Hear The Constant Shit. . Fuck You Mother Fuckers. . Is That What You Want HUH?! IS THIS WHAT YOU FUCKING WANT?!
Dear Bullies. . Are You Fuckin' Happy Now ? I'm On The Brink Of Exstinction All Cause Ya'll Were Thinkin' I Wasn't Peakin', Hate I Wasn't Seekin You Ain't Know My Cup Runneth Over, I Had The Summons Closer And I Had To Run It Slower So Boulders Could Fall Off Of My Shoulders But Ya'll Jus Had To Keep Fuckin' Pushin' Didn't You, I'm Sick Of You Thinkin You Better Than Me As Individual, I Wish To Rid Of You But I'm Not That Big A Fool, I'll Jus Release Myself From Earth Instead You Ain't Worth Blood Shed, I'll Jus Become Dead, You Want This Right ? You Seem To Flaunt Tight, But When You Walked At Night, Fright. . Is All I Saw, You Fuckin' Fags, YOU Suffocate On The Plastic Wrappin' Your Ass Attackin Me, Spaztic Snappin', You Tried To Rack Me Happy But You Fuckin' Idiots Just Pushed Me, From Smile To Anger Quick You In Danger Slick, Over Some Shameless Shit, Forget The Famous Tip I'm Fuckin' Travis You Retards, And These Scars Are From Years Of Supposed Peers Like You, Poppin' Off N Shit, Now I'm Near The Clear Above FUCK YOU, I've Ducked Few, But Some Bullets I Just Wish Had Of Hit Me I Want To Die After I'm Shot N Not Live Through Fuckin' Nine Like Fifty Now You Ain't Gotta Get Me, I'm Lookin' At This Rope, Waitin' To Choke Should I Die Fast Or Slow ? Lemme Know You Fucks, You Want Me To Go YOU FUCKING MADE ME DO THIS, Don't Read This Clueless, Despair Is What I've Been Through, Not Like You Care, But I Figured I'd Go Bare Listen To Me You Fucking Pricks, I Don't Give A Fucking Shit About You And Secretly, If Need Be, I Would Fucked Ya'll Up. . But I Never Clowned You Or Fucking Hounded You, Told What You Could N Couldn't Do I Wouldn't Hurt Another Person, I'll Be Considerate, Shouldn't You ? Deliberate With Your Tyraids, As The Sky Fades, My Eyes Blazed I Try To Gyrate Other Thoughts Than Your Fight Ways In My Last Days I Couldn't Think Of One Fucking Positive, You Ruined My Life, Thanks Russian Roulette, Cussin' While Sweat Rushes Down My Neck, Fired A Blank That's Just One Bullet, Next Time I Pull It, My Brains Could Be Blown My Pain Strewn Over My Home, Now The Outcasts Are Not Alone Truthfully, I Wish One Of These Slugs Would Pierce Your Hatin' Veins My Fate's Unchanged, You Take My Name - N Write In Blood As I Escape The Pain, N Await My Train Of Death To Hustle Rope Tightened, I'm Done Writing, My Wrists Are Slidin', I've Cut My Muscles Thanks For All The Support You Gave, That's Just My Final Joke You Faggots Here's The Gun I Played The Card Of Death With, Shoot Yourselves - You Fucks Can Have It. . With The Utmost Hatred, Travis You Said So Much, I Bled So Much. . . I Was The Edge, You Fucking Pushed Me You Fed So Much, I'm Dead To Touch. . Go Ahead N Push Me I'm On The Edge. . Push Me. . I Was On The Edge You Pushed Me . . Now Pussies, I'm Dead, Look At Me. . As I Hang My Sorrows For You To See Dear Family. .
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01-08-04, 11:18 PM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: E38C 4580
Dear Family Will Be Part Two, Should Be Up Hopefully Soon. . This Is My First Time Doin Something Like This. . Two Verses In The Form Of Suicide Notes To Those Who Drove Me To The Point. . N No, This Are Not Real. . Jus An Idea I've Never Tried Before. . Pz.
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01-09-04, 07:09 AM | #3 | |||||||
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nice concept.... thought you put the piont across well... maybe in places it cound hane been worded better...but most hit.... maybe the syllables count count have been revisedto nelp the flow,,, but it was on for most.... interesting read.... jus work on the overall feel of the verse.... but looking forward ot part 2....pZ...
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01-09-04, 04:20 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: E38C 4580
Uppin.
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01-09-04, 09:17 PM | #5 | ||||
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Yeah this was pretty good i thought....enjoyed it.....structure was good in this.....the flow in this was alright, it got off at some points in this, but it was still good enough to carry on in the piece.....you had some nice vocab in this....multies were good as well i thought...it made a good read...keep at it.
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