replied to young mike and penskills newest ish


so this is somethin i dropped on another board but, said board is wack so ima let yall get at me with some feedback onthis ish

once again workin and tryin to avoid nocturnal tendancies
once again hurtin and tryin to hide internal discrepancies
but whats the remedy? hennessy? now im just guessin, see.
mu fuckers on the phone just testin me, got me potentialy, mentaly, crumblin down, but they fumblin now, sittin there wonderin how, we got such thunderous clouds, cause while you sit there tryn ta brain storm, we already got the game warm,what you want the fame for?...
could i get off trac a lil more? more than likely,
but ill try to avoid that, and get back to what im really annoyed at. All these kids and their weakly deployed raps. Thats right, deployed so weakly your boys still weepin, always thrill seekin, now his mouths leakin, so many holes, but not from tweakin,no body knows, what he did this weekend so let me give a re cap, called up homie on a tip for some free gats, he was tryin ta leave that, but he's a weak cat,
so he hit dude, like "yo, where da heat at?"
and he was like "yo, you sure you need that?"
" i didnt ask for your feedback."
"heyo, call me if yo need back, you know where I'll be at."
"yeah, i'll hit you up in minute, but right now i got some shit to finish"
so cat rolled on past, hand on his heater. Surveyin tha street for dude wearin beater. done already sold the glass, to a dirty ass tweaker,right there on tha corner by the parking meter. next thing he heard was click clack to his head, the pre emptive sound of a gat full of lead, turned slow around, barrel on his forehead.
"what up bitch,you thought for sure i was dead.
and whats more intense?, I caught you out clockin, with no defense"
"please dont start poppin, im tryna repent."
"What?take all my cash and then give me your two cents?! i aint hearin a damn thing yer sayin, speakin of repentin, ya better start prayin"
and just like that dude was layin belly up, i guess he didnt sell enough, or he'd a had some back when cats get buck.
but really i dont give a fuck, one dead tweaker deserves another,seen that shit destroy my best friends brother.
when it comes to drugs there can be no other, i like my shit green and thoroughly covered,
white dust and red hairs,thoroughly smothered, just like my verbal recipies, so baked,
leadin back to my nocturnal tendancies, so dont hate

S.o.E.
...i rest my case....

structure needs alot of work just like me....lol
but i thought that you displayed alot of skill
and an obvious talent......
you need to brush up on coomplexity and punches but they wernt weak just needing minor elivaten other then that good work

^^ this kid is the man,
well damn were every were
good shit fam

..Long as shit..LOL!!..this was a nice piece..because of your structure it was a little hard to read..but..other than that..your flow was about an 7.5..your vocab about the same..this was an alright 'piece..peace...

Nice shit man... To me this looks like it was written to become an audio so I'll look forward to that if it is.. Flow was smooth, nice multis.. Punchs were good.. Maybe a bit more wordplay for my liking but this was soem nice shit definetly..SOE on fire..peace

Holla

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Sonz Of Enlightenment

uppin for some heads to read
holla with some feed back

replied to classx keystyle and nc kamakazie

FIYAH!