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Old 01-03-04, 10:48 AM   #1
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CORRUPTED VISIONS: Looking Forward

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http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...523#post1044523
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...527#post1044527
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...540#post1044540


It’s the start of a new year a new destination
A fresh start, there’s no need for complaining
Cos the skies clear, and so does the raining
Forward from now, is there for the making
The taking, the emancipation of pastures green
Fresh horizons comprising of the unforeseen
Put ya best foot forward look past the screen
Of ya former life where you were once deemed,
Or away from events you used to be teamed
And leaned with, it can now be a myth
Lay to let rest like cement holding ya bricks
Cos Its Character building, don’t worry or fix
It’s fixed! Jus look to the future, do what suits ya
‘Restore’ ya computer back to before the strife,
Ya cant live it again, but ya can cut a new slice
Living it twice, this time roll high on the dice
Hit a double cos despite ya past now can be bright
It can excite, fill with delight, with many good nights
Getting it right, not wrong, true not false-
-Cos those times can be Gone!…
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Old 01-03-04, 02:33 PM   #2
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Old 01-03-04, 02:45 PM   #3
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yeah, good drop, flow was consistant and your vocab and structure were good too, but i'm sorry i don't agree with all that fresh start crap..mainly because my punishments for my sins go on into the new year..thats another story..all i can say is that..i only regret getting caught...lmao..oh well, like this keep it up dunno why its being slept on..GO CORRUPTED VISIONZ!
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Old 01-03-04, 02:48 PM   #4
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Flow never gave up that was good, structure was good...very readable... some of it got corny like Liba said... it was overall a good all around piece... 7/10

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Old 01-03-04, 03:05 PM   #5
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yep yep good drop kid... good vocab ... road the topic very well... good flow everything was on point... i was feelin in... good ish dunny... on a rate... 7.8,8.0/10 dunny it was good ish... nice read

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Old 01-04-04, 03:06 AM   #6
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Yeah i agree this was a good drop here man.....your structure was good....the flow in this was nice, it stayed on point through out the piece i thought, never really got off...you had some good vocab like always lol....overall it was a good piece...keep at it.
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