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If you can download the instrumental to Blackalicious' 'Alphabet Aerobics', the lyrics fit in quite nicely...



Alphabet Acrobatics


assault all assuredly awesomely astounding
abstract with attacks, always askin around and

be the better buster batter been and break a bone
blast your bowl and beat a bong bangin beats your own

cussin crap and crammin cones chronic crawls along creatin
collossul crimes crushin creeps callin for a cone

days driving down done dope dealin dime
dumb doin drugs do a demonstration

erase each and every energetic enemy
eternally extending ease externally the end of me

find a fat feel, flow the funk freestyle
finally face fools and fly your finest file

grace gods ground got a good grip glorious
get a great girl gotta grab i guess gorgeous

have a hot home here is how its honed to hear like a
hound at heel humble hurry heavily hes here

image i intrigue insert idioms intensly
illest whem i'm irate indecisive and immensely

jacked from the joint jammed dribblin with juices
jumped up and joyful at the drugs we judge for uses

king kong cant come close to catchin this kid
crafty with class killin closely with a clue kit

laughing at a loser lovin life longer
lotta lost leaders like lunar landers

mike in my mouth movin mimes mechanically
meanly memorise it in my mind mentally

never knew none now i'm not a number
need a new name now a newer nigga

orally i omit only off bits outlaw
opening often orate only on hits

pleasure pushing pens packing props playfully
pressin for a part pullin pounds payin fully

quickly on the quest carrying my quick styles
quittin on questions quicker than a cluey child

rippin real rhymes wreakin rude and unruly
writing reasons to replace your rank truly

spittin shit slippin slick slidin like its slippery
sorta show sticks so i spit shit sickly

too tough timin tricky trips tickin time
test teams try to take it topside im tryin

universal, uniquely untouched
using youse and upturn views i'm upfront

volley out verbs vainly versin every vowel
viewing viciously and i'm very, very virile

watchin well i'm waitin which way it wanna weigh
where i went wishin when we wanna walk away

exercise extremely accept whats expected
xrated excuses, existence extended

young youths yellin at you yearnin for a use
uniforms used yearly in your universe

zimmin on a zephyr zippin through the magazine
stimulatin music like a zanzibar disease, itz eezy!!




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your wordplay is fucken phenominol and so is the play off words sadly some bars hed little to no meaning but a feel good vibe you can catch an ol school beat to this easily and feazebly.....you got skill but you need to focus just a lil harder and direct to one goal and target then exploit it.
never the less this is real good just needs minor work

Yeah this was alright i thought....structure could use some work though i think, but you can work on that...you had some good workplay...you took a good approach on this concept i thought, its been done before but you did good on it i think....keep at it.

Wow. This was really good, but after reading all the letters it got kinda boring. There is definatly talent though. You should do this in all of your pieces. Good job.

seen alot of this before from other cats, Id admit yours is one of the better of all of the ones i've seen... Like Word Play said though alot of the lines really held no meaning beyond the words. I fealt you did a niice job at creating meaning in the lines that did make sence though. I think I would focus on building this off one general topic next time though. I was feeling the vocab and the attempt. I will check out some of your other work when I get a chance to see what else you got...

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the flow was tight and the structure wasnt to bad even tho it could use some work. however i found it kinda hard to follow in some places becuase its hard to make complete sentances using the same letter. personally i couldnt have done it lol.

thanks for all the feed back so far. i would appreciate more peeps peepin this. maybe some mods when they get time. i will fully work on my shit. keep your eyes pinned for more spits by my lips. shibby as. i am truly elevatin. more encouragement, and gettin better on my part, will hopefully get me there...
many thanks and have a great new years to y'all...

THis was a hard piece it looked like, i have respect for the thought it took to do this drop, work on the meanings of lines and it will be straight

i liked it.......i liked the creativity...........great vocabulary....prally took sum time........structure was so so........
metas ehh....
wordplay great....
meaning.....so so....
good piece....
deserves......V
8/10

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wanting more input from you guys, please gimme some feedback

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this was sum funny shit. half the stuff u said didn't mean shit though but i liked it alot.keep at it

most of it actually does make sense, you just need to look a little deeper. anyways, uppin for more comments...

Played concept, well executed.
Strong wordplay..everything made sense..
As for as i can see..lack of vocabulairy,
Which is perfectly understandable in this case.
A more even lined structure would've helped..
& seperatin' each bar?..unnessacerry.
Still, enjoyable.. ok read.

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Good concept, but I suggest you work more with the theme.