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Old 10-08-03, 09:32 AM   #1
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Here, Me, Raw Or Not At All?

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The second that the bracket opens, it's kudos to the coda
main stage act of decency, nope.. closure pseudo to the cosher
stooge to the motion of how this mainstream conveys a regime
hung out, too dry- similar to how a gallery arranges it paintings
Starting from the famous, the lesser known artists, "the fizzle"
I'm here, centerpiece of the cryptic puzzle, stuck in the middle
Luck is dicidual and its crunch time, little & big hands jilt
the time fabric that quilts us isn't enough to withstand hell
Because we're in damn hell, condemned to monotony in Cocytus
homaging whats wrong with us- mediocrity and obviously its obvious
Opportunity to squander trust, we're all either ignorant or oblivious
imaging the facts within my tracks- instrumentals for idiots
Independance forms diligence, hence the construction of writtens
scripting my erratic psyche, so society leaves me with pittance
Thats the entirety reach of the system, business is mistrust
untill I'm included, I'll be bleeding for the stick and the carrot
The epiphany- I'm absent, my attents are an abstract attempt
Even with my own complex breakdown, no-one gets it in the end
So we appreciate the retrospect, heaven sent? tragic hoaxes?
whats left to defend at the end of the end? the bracket closes
But still it rotates....
From mothers labour day, I began the quote with a swan song
since that juncture its been going on and on, dawn till dawn
The scorn bearing a halo of thorns, life is tabloid fascination
predictabilty the idea of fate, the trait from android animation
Mancipation to this passage, and the quote seemingly perpetual
deeming me- third dimensional, upon seeing me- exceptional
But lugs are to the dirt, anything thats worth saying is unheard
unlike the rioting herd of makeshift expressionists we concur
If thats "Word" then correct stability inside the CPU generation
morals based against the brain freeze seeping through your Playstation
I base my mind to pen movement on the foundations of enlightenment
where's my red carpet or 1000 hit mark? a lost verve in the environment
Burning like a firework, or is my art the effect of burning desire
or is it just me purging the fire representing lifespan in entire?
But I tire.....in search of that "end quote"
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Old 10-08-03, 09:50 AM   #2
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From mothers labour day, I began the quote with a swan song
since that juncture its been going on and on, dawn till dawn
The scorn bearing a halo of thorns, life is tabloid fascination
predictabilty the idea of fate, the trait from android animation

THAT WAS SO DEEP IMPORTANT AND PERFECTLY FORMATTED!!!!!!Because we're in damn hell, condemned to monotony in Cocytus
homaging whats wrong with us- mediocrity and obviously its obvious
Opportunity to squander trust, we're all either ignorant or oblivious
imaging the facts within my tracks- instrumentals for idiots
Independance forms diligence, hence the construction of writtens
THIS AS WELL

YOUR VOCAB IS EXTRORDINARY AND SO IS THE FLOW....YOU FAVOR AESOP IN CERTAIN PRTS THEN BRANCH YOUR OWN REMIX.THIS WAS FLAWLESS.MAD RESPECT
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Old 10-08-03, 11:13 AM   #3
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I Love The Way You Write Mate..Always A Good Read..You Remind Me Alot Of What I Write Yet Just Better...I'll Admit It Haha I Give Credit Where Its Due...Its Just Great Writing Ay...The Vocab Is Fucking Ridiculous Uh Haha..The Best Thing About Your Writtens Is That They Are Not Jibber, Contrary To What Some Say..You Get POints Across Tops With Excellent Flow And Choice Of Words..This Was Dope For Real Man..Didn't Look As If You Took Much Time On This One But Fuck Its Still Come Out Very Nice Ay...

"The epiphany- I'm absent, my attents are an abstract attempt
Even with my own complex breakdown, no-one gets it in the end"

Oh Shiiiiieeeetttt That Is True Haha...Good On Ya Mate...Shits Tight...Pz...
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Old 10-08-03, 10:57 PM   #4
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Thanks alot for the reply you two..
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Old 10-09-03, 03:05 AM   #5
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this was defintely hot, good wordplay, and vocab expressed. It was defintely abstract in it's own way yet understadable in more places then others. You had a good sense of imagey too involved in it which is always good for writing. My favorite line was
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Opportunity to squander trust, we're all either ignorant or oblivious
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that was dope right there, good wrd usage throughout this piece well put. Peace
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Old 10-17-03, 01:28 PM   #6
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Thanks for the reply..

I kind of let this get slept on...

Who'd have thunk it?
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Old 10-18-03, 03:54 AM   #7
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WOOT WOOT......its me again

Man i love ur verses...i like ur worplay and u always impress me with what u write about...ur vocab is so much higher than me which pisses me off LOL...i cant really state a good line cuz i liked pretti much everyone u had in that verse...VER VERY HOT SHIT....Pz...can u please check mine..its called MISSING YOU...

heres the link for it http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=85119

nice drop keep dropping the illnesssss
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Old 11-07-03, 12:08 PM   #8
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Thanks for the reply man..

Sorry bout the aim thing again..I've been moody lately LOL
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Old 01-09-04, 11:55 AM   #9
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LOL...I just noticed this was a tad slept on

And seeing as it was the only piece I had written in a couple of months *cough*
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Old 01-09-04, 12:56 PM   #10
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From mothers labour day, I began the quote with a swan song
since that juncture its been going on and on, dawn till dawn
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Old 01-09-04, 02:53 PM   #11
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This was an excuisit Scriptured piece of mind....Arrowbic, I applaud you....

Your sense of ability to know what would make ur piece abstract is allso out of this world....

U truly are a BackPacker (Lol), I applaud you again...!!! Props
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Old 01-09-04, 03:48 PM   #12
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LoL@Cam

Yup backpacker4life haha..

Thanks for the reply bro
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Old 01-09-04, 04:17 PM   #13
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..Very Very Nice..enough said..
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Old 01-09-04, 05:07 PM   #14
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^ TOSSER....

Hey Demik, Peep my Piece if you would be so very kind...



http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=103726

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Old 01-09-04, 05:07 PM   #15
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N-DemikTheGay - reply to my piece with something witty so it ups to the top = )
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