Feed me the fuel that i need to succeed/
ammunition to thrust me on forward, procceed/
Through failure, let me strive for first place/
Give me the grace to replace evil dreams that i chase/
Past disgrace, through hatred, futher onwards to love/
Passion seeks what the heart desires above/
In his glove, Lord holds the key to my fame/
Only he sees past the color, the race and the name/
His peoples are equals, all players of the game/
And here comes the sequel, were exactly the same/
Whether your female, black, yellow white/
Stand together and on this wasteland unite/
Build us all a strong future, to Jesus delight/
Could this be the end, of our plight and cruel spite?/
Could there be someone among us, to discover the light?/

damn...Flow here was outragous (good)...you have a good knowledge of internals and you certainly applied that here...executed it well, and the structure also was dope.

Nice concept and you applied some dope vocab to express it, got the message through well however i kinda get the feelin' it was inspired by 'pac, but none-the-less it was good.....

In his glove, Lord holds the key to my fame/
Only he sees past the color, the race and the name/ - dope.


3/5 - nto too much wrong to say about it dawg..keep this shit up...if you got time, hit my piece up...link is in my sig...

Poetic typa ish here,liked this -

"Past disgrace, through hatred, futher onwards to love/
Passion seeks what the heart desires above/
In his glove, Lord holds the key to my fame/
Only he sees past the color, the race and the name/"

Good message and imagery in this peice,afew multies,vocab was descent,this was mostly about the message i feel and this was a descent drop man.

Peace

inspired by Pac, yeah, i guess so, though not intentionally, guess i listen to his lyrics too much, pick stuff up....thanks for the replies..much appriciated...

feedback anyone?

i thought it was kinda poetic the way you didnt carry the ryhmes far, but still it flowed decent... the content was good and you portrayed the topic well.... yeah good drop here Liba....keep these sort coming....pZ....

decent drop...flow was okay...nothing spectacular....work on yer multis....nice imagery and content....but stay up

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