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*Please be advised. This is going to be made into an audio. Do not mind the uneven bars.
One Moment

One Moment please
[Intro]
Every second we live...Is a new opportunity to do something great...to achieve what we never could believe achieving...To do the impossible...to rise above the image that is portrayed for us and to excel to a new higher level...In the rare occasion...you have long peroids of time to achieve this...but like most of us...were only given one moment...


Thought about life one moment, only saw demerits
feelin inside of my soul many would find hysteric
at the fact, Im a nigga, opposin to the gun barrell
how Id rather use words, than violence in quarrels
One moment could be great, others are drastic
gain 6 g's hustlin, or 6 down in a casket
One moment, escaped reality by tokin
thought a higher leveled life was revolved round smokin
One moment complicated, shit aint simplistic
u can do good or aggravate existence
One moment is equal to whatever you think
Slow like death or fast like death at ya brink
One moment could be your finding of success
Or a pathetic attempt and only increase stress
We rest, and think how our lives have been stolen...
only time success matters...is during ur one moment...

One moment ago, I was spittin simple rhymes
Then I elevated, even maybelline was eyein my lines
started 2 shyne, and my sun will never fall
Now im rockin rocawear, no more paint-stained overalls
At one moment we were protected by God’s castle
Now we under control by the atheist capitol
Not livin by the supernatural, but by the power of the dollar
Many rather get rich or die tryin than drop for bein martyrs
And fightin the good fight, all choosin answer 1 when #2 is the right
God was our fright, so we chose to live in the night
And destroyed the world by steppin into Lucifier’s light
and the Might and power of destruction was shown
the one moment we got greedy, evilness was exposed
and what rose...was what one moment can do....
reveal the darkness fears...between me and u....

One Moment I was weak, only impotent words
now articulate lines appear when my voice is heard
wasn't grown into success, my field yields defeat
Dis ain't a junction, me and success dont meet
Were distant, far, were like two lost brothers
could accomplish so much if we just had eachother
But the moment that'll come...next to never
Success shinin in the light...Im still fightin the weather
I'm forgotten by him, left to fall on the ice
as he sips henn with celebs and enjoys the good life
I never got no strikes, never tried one pitch
could be rap's Barry Bonds with my giantlike hits
but this shit, the burden, my skill can't go above
is that none take me serious cuz im from Canada
so my value goes from dollars, lowered to cents
to the point where this song is where my moment is spent...

uppin for sum votes plz.......

uppin for sum votes plz.......

wats a guy gotta do for sum feedback here?

cant even get one break down of this piece............................................. .................................................. ...........................

i thought this was pretty decent... like to hear the audio... the concept was ok.... sometimes that sorta syle.. 'one moment'... doesnt carry very good, but i thought yours did ok... maybe a few less, but the scheme was decent and it flowed pretty well....