Chorus

Its like..Whatever ya want, Whatever ya need,
I jus wanna be your.....fantasy
It's like..Whatever ya want, Whatever ya need,
Lets be together forever and ever indeed.
We need this relationship cause its all about us, And us is thing that's all about trust so...
It's like.. Whatever ya want, Whatever ya need,

Oh Baby I'm dying inside it feels like I'm bleeding, But you jus wanna be friends now thats deceiving, Believing that one day we could make this work,
But deep down in my heart I feel like a jerk, It hurts to see us kiss and smile eye to eye, But you know I'm standin here by your side willin to be your guy,
Again I'm not like othermen, I dont care about the lies you heard I'm not like them, Ahem lemme clear my throat a bit, And show you how you took my heart and ripped apart it, Now stop it I know you jus wanna be friends but I'm not feeling this, Cant we jus go back to the days of our first kiss, I miss all that we had and all that we shared, and the empty feeling I have is when you cared..bout me, dont stop me you wanted these feelings to be out in the open and when you read this you'll realize this was a rhyme that i wrote when...I thought about you....cause...

Its like..Whatever ya want, Whatever ya need,
I jus wanna be your.....fantasy
It's like..Whatever ya want, Whatever ya need,
Lets be together forever and ever indeed.
We need this relationship cause its all about us, And us is thing that's all about trust so...
It's like.. Whatever ya want, Whatever ya need,

Stopped smokin weed cause you wanted me too, Stop drinkin too cause you didnt want me too, I'd give it up all jus to be with you, I cant help it I'm whipped I love...you..So we grew apart this fall but my heart remains in memory, of what we couldve been or what we were meant to be, Why cant it be like them lost fairy tales, Instead my heart has a life sentence in Aphrodite's jail, Cause your not here, You dont care and all I am is here...lonely...But girl I jus wanna let you know that...

Its like..Whatever ya want, Whatever ya need,
I jus wanna be your.....fantasy
It's like..Whatever ya want, Whatever ya need,
Lets be together forever and ever indeed.
We need this relationship cause its all about us, And us is thing that's all about trust so...
It's like.. Whatever ya want, Whatever ya need,

Your my love...My heart...Girl you're all I need,
So whatever ya want, Whatever ya need,
Jus need to know if I'm ya man before I proceed,
Cause...

Its like..Whatever ya want, Whatever ya need,
I jus wanna be your.....fantasy
It's like..Whatever ya want, Whatever ya need,
Lets be together forever and ever indeed.
We need this relationship cause its all about us, And us is thing that's all about trust so...
It's like.. Whatever ya want, Whatever ya need....
It's like Love..Love...Love...(fade)

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damn 22 people read this and i cant get some props or anything?

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I don't think you have gotten many replies to this b/c it's too much of a gooshy love story with not much content to enjoy and keep reading about. The flow is alright but the content can be upped to make it more interesting. good luck

pz

This was alright i thought.....But dont put it in paragraph form like that, thats probably most people didnt read it, put it line on top of line, cause some people think its harder to read in paragraph form like that...sounds more like a audio piece...but overall a alright piece....keep at it.

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What they said...

Your content was....lacking. Good for a love story I guess, but you should try to
write it on a deeper level....

Rather than "Willing to be your guy.."

Think about what ^^^they said as well, it will help you..

(Hit my peice up in my sig please)!!!

..This shit just dragged on..your intentions were good..but overall you didn't come through..your content was majorly lacking..otherwise this could've been alright..peace..