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Old 01-18-04, 01:34 AM   #1
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words are decieving

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just starting out, tell me what you think...

Decieved by your sweet side, i decided to give it a chance,
but i was intrigued by your charms, and was left in a trance.
its started on a hot summer night,
you and your boys walking, asking for a light(for a cigarette).
then one of them pulled me aside, said you wanted to slide.
thought to myself, no doubt i'll try it out,
figured i would see what you were all about.
i wasen't feeling you at first, but little did i know,
that you were going to be the one i couldn't let go.
time passed and we kickin' it, im lovin' it, we intimate,
but then your ex interfered, and your feelings dissapeared.
when we chilled after that, everything between us was weird.
nights i stood up cryin', thinking about why,
why you said good-bye,why everything was a lie.
you had me fooled by your words and your touch,
but boy its over i took too much.
yea i still love you, but i'm not gunna chase,
what you did to me time wont erase.
and yea, i'm gunna miss your sweet embrace,
but we will meet again in a different time and place.
it's time i move on, it's wrong what we do,
but although it over, just remember i'll always love you.
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Old 01-18-04, 02:40 AM   #2
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pretty good you should make more
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I leave you in the same haze
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dun worry i aint done
this ish just begun
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Old 01-18-04, 11:30 AM   #3
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his is sum pretty gud shyt... yah shud ah added on to it with another verse and another rhyming scheme it would have illluminated the poem!!! return tha favor... read mine!!!!!
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