i had to collect this newb before carson could get at this whore/
the only thing he hits hard is head on the backboards/
follow through isnt bad, setup opening could have came a bit better
i sack hoardes..of wannabe emcees, sweep ashes under the table/
chuz this kid couldnt flow tight if his throat was stapled/
liken the follow through punch, set up seems more of a filler
his throat on cables..as i deliver a smashing pain/
while i leave him double-minded by slashing his brain/
ok punch, good concept
capping this lame....deliver caps in his fame/
the only track he layed on..was in the path of a train/
simple but doing the job so far, still not seeing anything extreamly hard[b]
this activist slain..his thread was for michealmadness who woulda lost if he showed/
and hes on top of the world...when standing on globes/
[b] a little bit of a played follow through.. set up could haveeen more directed
he drops below me..they'll be nothing but wackness/
went 2nd to show his skill on is on the bottom..like hiding under a mattress/
ok ender.. follow through was good little over drawn but nice, set wasnt bad.

Ya had an ok verse, could have workd a little more on setups and wording...your flow was ok good verse..




IP: 7A50 A5A0


ihgtt yo im the hardest in new york//my flows hard yours is soft like a un cooked pork//
not really feeling this start, reminded me of 50 cent... not really directed at dissing your opponent
im new in this game im in for the forchin fuck all the fame//when i murder u in this battel wont be no 1 to blame...u been rapping much longer/
not really seeing your diss/punch at your opponent... focus more on dissing him next time
but still im putting u to shame,HARDHITTER is the name beatting wacked rappers is the game....my words are getting in your brain got u sittin at your comp going fuckin insane//called michaelmadness out but u showed up like a flame!!////
aiight, good attempt at a personal, a little rewording would have helped the concept
stand up take a bow and remember my name....H.A.R.D to>> the H.I.T.T.E.R my lyrics got u gased up sitin on the shitter...your lyrics couldnt get any bitter...fuck it im out!/im gunna leave u with this and i aint no quitter!!!!!!!............~*1*~
ending wasnt the greatest

Ok basicly your flow was a little to simple here, didnt really focus on dissing you opponent. Add a little more creativity into you rhyme, work on dissing whoever you facing(stray from talking about yourself in a battle) build up a better flow( make it more consitant).... After that try going for some of the harder stuff like wordplay and metaphors..

vote- dazasta
Came through with better punchs

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