Yaz: Red
-uski-: black

this was done in 15 minutes so its not our best

Dear Mom And Dad

dear mother an fauther that i haven't evan met
y haven't u written bak, please tell me y u left
waz it kuz i waz bad, hone5t, i kan be better
thingz will ¢hange between u5, i 5wear we'll be together
if anything happened plea5e tell me im kuriou5e
im feelin delirou5e, the rage im holdinz iz ferio5e
it'z like im blinded by 5ight... waz it a fight
kan't we unlea5h the light an take the plit
to reborn our life, an get rid of all the 5trife
iz eatin at me, I HATE YOU, Y DID U LEAVE ME
you tri an de5ive me, theirz only one thing that kan free me
an it'z not like u would kare, u would have already tried
u kompleatly hide, an 5it bak, wile my life 5eemz like a lie
with thyz blade in my hand an a 5lit on my nek
u 5till don't gra5p the tek, take thyz az a reality ¢hek
from your baby boi who iz dieing wile he ritez thyz letter
if only u woulda awserd bak thyz would have all been better

Dear Gurl

I have thought About this For Ages I am not truely sorry
Dont cry For Me I was never ment to be In this Worlds Worry
I Preyed To the Last prey Askin Does she still Love Me Lord
When I was 2 you Never said a Work I was Just Really Ignored
No when i Look in your i see Eyes I was Never really Adored
So When I do this tonite my Life will hopefully be restored
In this World I never asked for more than a nomal happy life
Now Look What U did to me…Im standing here With A Knife
Seriously u said I didn’t deserve I bet when im finished u’ll be sad
At the moment Im going through questions It maken Me Mad
Now As I stand here with a knife in one had pen in the other
Hitting me telling me to do better…ur as bad as My step Mother
I have on thing to say to you….u really should here it
Me goin out with you made me go in this dark nitemare Pit
…………....…….yea that’s rite its ur fault……............……..…

This just in a rapper just commited suicide…he had a left one note to his uknown parents and one to his Girlfriend…He Slit He wrist at 12.00 P.M….more on the story tonite…

I liked your ideas but the end could have consisted more thought. The structure and scheme was nice, keep workin on that. Id like ta read sum more, maby on a different topic next time.

Story tellin verses are always nice to read... Sounded a lot like poetry but had a nice flow to it. I personally like Uski's verse a bit better tho... Deffinately nice for a 15 minute job..

- 1d