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Old 01-24-04, 03:13 PM   #1
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just some bs off the top of da head

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i got demons screamin from my penis,
why'd i fuck britney she has mad diseases,
now im at the doc's getting cleaned out ,
damn why did i bang that out??
i should have pulled out and let loose in her mouth
but her shit was twitching it felt to good to switch postions,
i was bent but this shit was hitting youd have to be there,
me knee deep in pussy shit shaved straight bare,
i was straight grizzly tearing it up without a care,
i was just a killing that cunt , busted a nut,
grabbed a blunt rolled up smoked up picked my clothes up
told that hoe to hold up grabbed my keys and bounced
went to dre copped a half ounce went to smoke
and started pissing blood on the couch
no control of my bladder pain rising like a ladder,
house on fire shit didnt matter all cause of dat girl
i wanted so bad to tag her the pain is relentless
the damn weed and liqs got me into dis
is it gonna end cause i fucked a bitch
i had dreams of being rich and shit
now im da kid who caught some virus from a syren
or cryus i see flashing lights but hear no sirens what the fuck!!
thank god im in my truck and i really didnt fuck the lil slut
or i would be a charity wit my pics on a bus

wow im bent as always but hit this up tell me what you think bs or what the fuck ever
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Old 01-24-04, 03:15 PM   #2
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^ cool sig..far as your flow..it was average..nothing I haven't seen before..it another flow without a good content...
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Old 01-24-04, 04:08 PM   #3
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cmon peeps hit this up tell me what you think
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Old 01-25-04, 12:22 AM   #4
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Yeah this was alright here....structure was ok, could be touched up in a few spots though i think....content needs some work though....try adding some multies to this to make it a bit better....flow in this was alright, it stayed on point pretty well....keep at it.
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Old 01-25-04, 11:54 AM   #5
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yo thanks for the honesty its a rarity here
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