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lukewarm feelings on a face that feels like mine comprehending God's design, linear motion from behind counting one to nine, but the values keep on changing don't know how to slow aging, taking now for rearranging thinking "wow, this is engaging" when I do not understand it's true that we can't land, so please take me by the hand and explain the little person who always whispers in my ear stupid-struck with fear I find that I'm too blind to hear the warnings that would tell me what was wrong with my life while the morning mourning did nothing strong to incite a little light on the subject of passive instigation movement heading for creation of a massive mental patient and my actions are not mine, I simple watch them happen the reaction's coming fine, just look to the past when I can't stop it, my body starts to shudder and jolt in another revolt, just try to be stubborn and bold my hands grow cold, the show told me I'm not myself but I assure me that I am in perfect mental health and moving with stealth, I go about my normal buisness but I feel my real life coming; not feeling senseless it all crumbles and falls and makes me realise something the light in the tunnel was that of something oncoming I felt somewhat wrong humming as the train came near I was really quite detached as I felt that same fear and as contact was made, there was no pain to deal with I simply stepped out with no motivation to feel this finding it difficult to take in all of what I just said I came to the realization: I was a guest in my own head
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rrrrrreeeeeeeee-plie
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..very good desricption of words...I really think your first line has alot of impact..I can't really pin-point why(I'm an idoit)but to me that was a powerful line...everything flowed very well..your content was excellent(something different from the most)..This was simply a "Dope" piece..
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interesting concept... and ya carried a nice flow, and good scheme, with a well worded verse... in a couple of places i thought a couple of words seemed a bit forced, but mostly a smooth read thru... and expressed well.....
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this was a dope concept, good flow and few fillers but, still a great read...
I liked this alot.. dope structure... damn 2 this PenSkills, u postin machine: Posts: 755 Joined: Dec 2003 lol but still dope piece
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yep
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Dope piece. Nice flow, showed some real good imagery,
got a well developed writers voice, original take on the topic, good use of vocabulary, overall real good drop, keep it up = ) can you check this out, and leave some feedback on how can elevate, thanks http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109162
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