proped by the element of life
i boast my seat and oversee millions
millions of reasons that fight for stance
millions of decisions that shake common ground
im proped in shadows that only detail
that words to me have lost meanin
i see no expression in beauty
only how it hurts those that it hasn't found
an unfortuante freedom
that doesn't dance in the moon lite
just a cold stare with mischeif mishaps
histories wittness same episodes plotted too
stand sum what confused
and now so cold
taking root to the earth feedin off its wisdom
grow uncompared in desert surroundings
my life is hollowed only left as a shell
a shell with sole purpose to intrap the chaos
graced by determenation
stayed loyal even when punshments bled hatred
hopin for my heart could grace another
only to understand misery does seek company
yet i stand so cold and so alone
my breathe is seen as smoke in the cold air
only to do nuttin but dissappear

I really liked this piece

especially this line,
the length, vocab, and word play fit this piece perfectly
no complaints
keep writin
keep elevatin
i'll keep readin

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."

^ thank you it means alot

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the one that watches the watchmen:

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the one that watches the watchmen:

Cant' really say much to this. It was great and all. But uh... what do you mean by 'proped'?

I suppose I'd be able to comprehend it better if I know that word.

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

prop in noun means a shell to image life. as a stage prop is a prop to picture somethin on stage. and to be proped would mean to me put sumwhere and supported. i hope that cleras it up alil bit

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the one that watches the watchmen:

Definitly cleared it up.

And certainly feeling this.

Much "props".

~Shalom~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

^ thanx
nice too see ya was enjoyin my work

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the one that watches the watchmen:

i read and reply to every thread that: A. reads my poems. B. to all mods or poets i see that openily thrive for elevation. C. have the slightest name that reminds me of iCP. cause its a poets personal decision to consider the power of community. those with the icp names usually tend to be females and Woo Woo

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the one that watches the watchmen:

i enjoyed your piece man keep it up

Intense even without the kind of complexity that came with it. It was the sharpness which made it that way.

It is hard to understand it extensively. At least how you were trying to depict it (or not). I guess it's that crypticism that malkes this piece what it is.

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I AM NEW TO RB BUT I REALLY ENJOYED READING YOUR POEM. I LIKE TO READ A POEM THAT TAKES A LITTLE MORE THOUGHT TO COMPREHEND. KEEP AT IT, YOU ARE TALENTED!

nice piece overall. you need to work on complexity a little bit. it flowed fine, and overall a ood piece. keep it up. hope to read more. would give a longer more detailed reply but im replying to a lot in here now & dont have time. -fm