jus a freestyle that imma put on audio when i fix it up n get sum feedback on it so peep this shit.........


-Damn...The streets...wut a place 4 ghettoes, gangstas, n even the wanksta ass............let me give a lil sumtin on the streets...

Ive learned evry thing from evry form o hood n street
Bled on concrete, learned how to cheat,full o deciet
U need true friends to get past or ull end up in defeat
U cant stand the heat then go on and retreat
Grow to it cuz ull be tested on evry corner
Theyll be racism,blazin bullets jus cuz u a foreigna
Roll wit cripz u fo sure dead by bloodz
Roll wit bloodz u gonna end up in a CRIPtic flood
Roll wit 1 color u get killed by the whole rainbow
U say u a pimp then u betta have at least a paid hoe
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The streets is nuttin to b messed wit,lives takin,bullets FADIN like MJ was they coach
So i ask yall foreignas neva approach unless u wanna end up a stomped cockaroach
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They sum rules rules u gotta learn 1st is u live by the gun
The 2nd is neva fuck a nun......................(syke)
2nd is neva rat out ur friends or ur crew
Cuz as soon as u open ur mouth they b afta u
3rd n last fo me is neva rip off sum1 or neva try n b hard
Cuz in the streets we can see right thru u n well test u n leave u scarred
Thats my walkthrough of de streets n wut i learned so far
Streets is a mystery so go see wut u learn while i puff my cigar

puffs cigar n exhales fumes
if u can live through muh fuckas laughs evilly



Peace n please give me sum feedback

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just for aesthetics sake, please spells word correctly...it helps me read it with the intended flow rather than have to go back and decipher what your saying.

A few times in this the flow was going very nice, easily with a beat...but it swtiched up too many time... you need to stay consitent with the flow and how many syllabuls you keep between the rhymes.

The wordplay was rather basic, but i had to chuckle at the MJ line...clever!!

Sit down and just vibe with the beat for like 10 minutes then see about rewriting this.. the flow will be there

hope this helped, and thanx for feed on mine

thanx for de feed back n ur welcome

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I really wasn't all that impressed with this..but again you said this will an audio..so..as you probaly know..somethings sound better as an audio..and some are better on text..your flow seemed bit choppy..peace..~click on my sig~