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01-30-04, 09:23 AM | #1 | ||||||
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jus sumthin!!!
IP: AB2B 9DE0
Collection days not seduction lays not reproductive fakes
Jus a right master crash. Faster cash when sellin hash in a bag 20 0r 10 I’ll pick it up but when, u mutherfuckers jus fuck us with ya deals so bent bush that’s extracted sucked off is the shit, turned in to a block that hot rocks but don’t hit Fuck this am a pay more an get fucked up so sore that in the morning am mawning for a cig that’s dutched up,,, weed so strong you cant even stand up,,, I roll the jays with this cause the bucket will kill,,,,,,, fuck I don’t need a bill telling me wat an how much I smoke,, jus open my insides, ,it don’t tell u am broke,,,jus that am dead in a dream in bed!!!! |
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01-30-04, 01:02 PM | #2 | ||||
Word.
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IP: DD10 0DFF
This was ok....structure was off in this, could be touched up a bit i thought.....had some alright multies in the first line, but try adding some more through out the piece though.....content was ok, but try to write about something different....but keep at it man.
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01-30-04, 01:05 PM | #3 | ||||||
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I Like The Fact The Structure Was Off It Gave It Its Own Feel Some Things Did Lack Like The Creativity Of Lines But Other Then That This Wasnt A Bad Read.
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02-02-04, 08:05 AM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: AB2B 9DE0
thanz for the feedback ppl!
peace |
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