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Through these eyes
IP: 2BE6 44D0
Pain and sorrow has brought me to believe/
that torture ain't enough and it's sumtin' i can't achieve/ my sentences bring the bad out in people and so they decieve/ another mother to grieve in her son's stupidity on these streets/ it's so sad sometimes to think back and reminse/ a small glimpse on the past got my mind froliced in no sense/ i spent my childhood runnin' from these demons/ they creepin in my mind when i'm sleepin/ i wake up some nights drencehed in cold sweat/ trying to think how i'm gonna get out this old debt/ that's when i hit my knees and begin to pray/ and think about who i'm gonna befriend today/ |
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IP: DD10 0DFF
This was alright here.....it was kinda short though, it could have been longer i think....structure was ok......the flow was pretty good i thought, stayed on through the whole piece....content was alright in this.....vocab was good.....had some alright multies in there....keep at it.
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