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Old 02-03-04, 05:52 PM   #1
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Perceptions

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Parental discretions stressing their perception of life’s lessons/
Forkless direction, mind infections not detected by dissection/
Intentions of grey suit professions force weak-minded to sessions/
Further digressin, left restin in the same box as confession/
Men love to hate, brains void and emotions banned/
Turn the contents and like convex the issue expands/
Conquer and divide, Races can’t coincide due to National pride/
No rules to abide provides a place for hate to reside//
Single High school dropout mother facin destitution/
Turn to prostitution, the people’s pollution/
Get caught and persecution is the government’s solution/
attempt revolution and execution’s the retrebution//
These rainy dayz, minds eye clouded wit purple haze/
Live to spark and blaze, parents this is not a phaze//
Solve problems like dirty clothes, we just "shout it out"/
Think it out, we're the people our parents warned us about//

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Inventions implimentin brain tumors to baby boomers/
Rumors and liars have a telephone wire inhabitin your pumas//
Kids in critical condition, no help from a doctor’s prescription/
Last transition sans an inscription, thanks to a conscription mission/
It’ll suffice to say George sacrificed another life and he’s wishin/
People would stop stealin, the government hates competition//
Take the bullet from the brain and cure 3rd eye blind, press rewind/
Eclipsed mankind, an eye for an eye will leave the whole world blind//
Like eatin rubber I will bounce shit, take a hit and denounce fits/
Live wit it, life is a foreign language, nobody can pronounce it/
Rappers need puntin, don’t care about your frontin and stuntin/
I got money to last my life unless I choose to buy something//
Inspiration, something triggers in the imagination/
The destination is the processor of information//
Devoid of disease and inflimation, fed by resperation,/
God’s strategic placement allows communication through tongue and cheek statements//
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Old 02-03-04, 07:03 PM   #2
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Upping, by the way thanks for the welcome credz
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Old 02-03-04, 07:17 PM   #3
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I thought this was alright here.....The vocab in this was real good i thought, nice vocab through the whole piece....the flow in it was pretty good i thought....structure could be touched up a bit, but still good....dont use /<-those, try not to anyway...but keep at it.
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