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01-20-04, 02:57 PM | #1 | ||||
That's Right...I'm White
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First Song i've recorded
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K thanks for all the feed back i think......
i was sick when i did this so, i know my voice was a little messed o well what can ya do, and i have an accent so that doesn't help but anyway, i'll keep workin at it Last edited by Krem : 01-23-04 at 02:54 PM. |
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01-20-04, 03:12 PM | #2 | ||||||
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Your not enunciating when you TALK, sound like u got marbles in your mouth.
Flow is choppy as hell.... um, get cool edit, dont record with the beat playing in the background....record over the beat.. 1
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01-20-04, 03:23 PM | #3 | ||||
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well ya,,,like i said, first song i've recorded, and i didn' have cool edit at the time, but now i do, might re-record again, but thanks for the reply anywho
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01-20-04, 06:59 PM | #4 | ||||||
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listenin.. i like that guitar line.. quality was horrible.. flow was really off... n like alca said..annunciate better... but this needed a lot of improvement.. but its not that bad for a first audio..
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01-21-04, 05:20 AM | #5 | |||||||
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wtf was that noise...lol it was ur track?....wtf?...
shitty quality...wtf...ur voice is weird...peashh... flow=need some...even a lil... doesnt sound like ur catching the ceat.... i...i ...was in...in...some.. i knew... okay okay... work on shit, keep dropping, and u'll get better... like...ur voice...just...iono...work on delivery and flow...i didnt pay attention to ur lyrics...sorry...they sounded OKAY....but yeh... nice job... stay up ~1~
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01-21-04, 02:45 PM | #6 | ||||
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aight cool,
i just kinda edited it some again probly made it worse haha but oh well thanks for the replies |
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01-21-04, 06:30 PM | #7 | ||||||
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Returnin the reply...
Sounds like this was done on soundrecorder or something? Beat sounds like it's in the background, not mixed down. Sounds like your reading off the paper. Your stayin on beat surprisingly nice for a first audio. "not what we do- but whhere we go" "soilders riskin lives"- word. Vocals are goin back an forth in my headphones. I like the message, dope concept. "world today- to hard to predict", "one day we'll live in peace", doubt it. No too bad for a first attempt. your presence, emotion, a distinct flow-- it'll all come with experience. Keep at it, you got a good foundation to build off. Lookin forward to more.... |
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01-23-04, 12:58 PM | #8 | |||||||
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Peash????????? What The Fuck Is That. U Need To Get Some TutoriNg From <anti> Daddys Little Gurl Was Awesome. Anyway Peash Krem
Peash?????????peash?????????peash?????????peash??? ??????peash?????????peash?????????peash?????????pe ash?????????peash?????????peash?????????
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01-23-04, 01:03 PM | #9 | ||||||
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Ja Rule in the sig ill leave the comments to myself lol 1
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01-25-04, 01:13 AM | #10 | |||||||
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im sry but that was the worsed rap i have ever heard
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02-02-04, 10:52 PM | #11 | ||||||
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Hey, I don't think u suck. It was very funny. The serious rap, was funny. Peash Krem, Peash!
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02-03-04, 02:19 AM | #12 | |||||||
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i like da beat man, it suits tha message u trying to get across. ur voice cud use some work though. spit with more expression and u'll get better. u did sound like u read off paper but try n work on ya self a bit, it'll come. da lyrics are ok and da meaning behind it all woz good. like i feel wot u woz trying to say. keep working and u'll get better..not bad for a first spit..
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