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Old 02-03-04, 04:25 PM   #1
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Poetic Depravity...

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Loneliness is killing me, eating at my heartstrings,
Tearing me apart at the fibre of my feelings,
Aches and pains, nothing to gain, all is lost,
Holy wings, ripped at the seams, wires are crossed,
Fuses blown, anger reigns over a world of misplaced hope,
Love of suffering and lives lived with sin, beyond a joke,
There to provoke the aid of war destroying all the simple folk
That follow the flock, jump on the wagon, the earth gone up in smoke
Imagery is real, and reality is violence, violence prays on idle hands
That the devil sounded sirens, weapons firin' bullets shroud the land
Cover the earth like locousts, a plague of human demand,
Like a thorn amongst the roses we sit and spite, all that is different
A beautiful flower, deprived of its petals, deflowered in cruel innocence
No defense, like heartless serpents we hide and scorn
Dread the day the sky fell in, and darkness cloud the morn...
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Old 02-03-04, 04:29 PM   #2
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this should really belong in Poetic Scriptures, but i kind of fancied i'd get a varied response here..so thats why i posted it, i don't technically recall actually sparking the idea, just words fired onto a page i guess...
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Old 02-03-04, 04:30 PM   #3
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My favorite femcee..(just favorite emcee)...this was nice...for some reason you remind me alot of Dev(he's very dope!)...anyway..your flow is consistent through out the whole rhyme and your wordplay is sick~~~this is a nice little short and sweet(just like you)piece...good job Fan~~~~~~bye~bye~
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Old 02-03-04, 04:43 PM   #4
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Wow this was really great Fanta! Very emotional! Im all about that! I loved it great job! Everything was placed nicely...Good wordplay, content, and flow! Once again, good job........props......Hit my latest up if you have time....i would appreciate some honest feedback.

I Bought Her Flowers Today
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111616

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Old 02-04-04, 04:38 PM   #5
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thanks for being so supportive, i'm in a foul mood, i got played by a master of the game, now i must sit in tears...not to worry, i'll bounce back atcha, ain't nobody putting me down..
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Old 02-05-04, 12:31 PM   #6
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luv to hear from yall...

if ya don't mind replying, i'd be eternally gr8ful??
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