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Old 02-03-04, 01:01 AM   #1
Sureal
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On The Other Side.

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On The Other Side.

Hit With The News, At Quarter Past Nine.
A State Of Shock, Was What Hit My Mind.
Travel The Streets, Looking For Answers.
Why Me, And How?.. Hit With This Cancer.
Just A Young Man,.. A Family To Tend To.
You Always Helped, Thanks I Do Send You.
Every Sunday I Sit, In The Lords Church.
No Help To Get, My Pain Only Gets Worse.
All My Friends Gone, Last Time I Checked.
Pain Comes From All Angles, I'm A Reject.
Ones Who I Loved,..Have All Deserted Me.
Even God Forgot, I Guess He Diverted Me.
If You Take My Advice,.You Will All See.
No-One Can Be, What You Want Them To Be.
I'm Just One Man, Seems No Power Is Held.
Taught By My Pain, But Life Is Withheld.
Through The Time, I Almost Did It Myself.
Just Always Thought,.. Look At My Health.
I Thought Hard.. One Thing Was Realized.
Never Make It Easy, Emotions Disguised.
Flip Things Over, Look At Them Reverse.
No Matter How Bad, Could Always Be Worse.
When Your Two Worlds, Will Finally Collide.
Sometimes You Must Look, On The Other Side.
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Death Is Inevitable.. The Cancer Did Catch Up To Me.....Goodbye..
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Old 02-03-04, 01:40 AM   #2
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Good drop...it seemed kinda rushed because it didnt pack as much vocab as usual
the imagry was kind of lacking...in comparison to your usual work

i like the way you flip the ending over 'the other side'
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like that

i dare you to dig around and find my CBL drop
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Old 02-03-04, 10:23 AM   #3
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Old 02-03-04, 07:00 PM   #4
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well it had a great flow to it and the concept was good, but like realist said the vocab you useally put into your peices just wasnt there. I still think it was an exceptional peice, a great read. Liked the ending, it was creative and original.
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