Krem
Ever since i picked up a pen and started to write
it's like all my shit on my shoulder's begin to ignite
so much i wanted to get off but i didn't know how
almost took it out on my friends, but couldn't allow
aight woah woah....hell with this poetic shit

aight yo...check it

Since the first day sitting in class wit a pen and paper
fed up with so much shit, begin to write i couldn't take er
just started to flow everything on my chest started to blow
it was amazing like woah as the lyrics on the page begin to grow
so much emotions just on that one simple page
lost in the lyrics no longer trapped in a cage
free at last as the anger slipped away into the past
like it wasn't even there it went away so fast
but i don't only do it for me, i do it for my friends too
inspiring me to write and for that i wanna thank you
helping me get up when things definatly looking down
always being there for me tellin me things will come around
and you were always right like everything was all planned out
all my friends specially Christa, ain't no way i could live without
if y'all weren't there i dunno what or who i'd be
i'd probly be lost forever, lookin for life's key
i write these lyrics cause i want everyone to know the way i feel
i like you i hate you, no longer i let that shit be concealed

Chorus x2
when we pick up the mic or get a pen to write
the lyrics we recite could blow your mind they just might
the rhymes we spit are tight, doesn't matter that we're white
we do this shit for us, don't give a fuck if you like

Mc Russie
yo yo yo yo,
Rap and hip hop are the best
Betta than all the fuckin rest
There no doubt who I’ll be jamming too
Eminem and 2pac playing through and through
2pac is what got me rhyming
the timing was right, now im shining
but he’s know long with us now, he’s deceased
thug life till I die, 2pac rest in peace
Eminem is the other inspiratrion
Listening to him is like being on a vacation
Im flowing to this verse that im dropping
but it aint over yet, so I aint stopping
Shaun lucky its in words, otherwise it’ll be his head im choppin
Try to understand, im a grown fucking man
I am who I am, if you don’t like it, I don’t give a damn
It’s been a while but thanks to eminem I can freestyle
Ands i do it just to see you laugh and smile
Krem and me don’t listen to that pop shit, it just bores us
Sit back, while I leave this track and listen to the chorus

Chorus x2
when we pick up the mic or get a pen to write
the lyrics we recite could blow your mind they just might
the rhymes we spit are tight, doesn't matter that we're white
we do this shit for us, don't give a fuck if you like


Krem
I'd like to thank all my friends, Tim, Josh, Brad, True, Keri, Christa, and everyone else that's been involved in my life

Mc Russie
Thanks Eminem and 2pac…
You’re the inspiration

thought this was ok, nuthin special.... but still decent... krem your verse had a nice flow going with some decent wordplay.. the scheme seemed a bit basic inplaces, and the vocab could be better, but the overall content was good... Russie, your flow was a bit choppy... the vocab was pretty limited aswell, but again it was an ok read... the overall feel of it was good.... and i liked how you ended it..... like i said decent......

this was the first time I seen you on this side Krem...and I must say..I was not dissapointed..you had a great flow going on..and your wordplay was onpoint...on the other hand..Mc Russie's flow seemed a bit choppy and a bit forced in some places...good work though..keep up..peace...peep out my new piece...dream or reality...

Wow.. Might I just say that is a GREAT FUCKING TITLE.

Most of u that read the 2nd verse, the bit about me choppin shauns head off.
just so u know the background of it, i did a song about cutting shaun to bits.
so thats the reason behind it.

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Mc_Russie

like that title do ya Inspire it was spose to be inspiration, i jsut changed it, so it might of worked ,might not of.

Anyway thanks for the feedback
uppin for more

Good collab....a lot of good descriptions and evident lines...some good detail and imagry...an okie collab...nice read...keep it up

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