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Old 02-06-04, 09:50 AM   #1
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From the wansbeck in my dialect we reppin 1E
We’re free minds in cruel times living life to a T
Fuck wannabe’s and record deals… its day release
Bitches getting fleeced like fucking with the police
Im more street, living day to day and in for the moment
More potent than a dead rodent… but to the beats
At least, til im old, before im dead, buried and deceased
In my coffin listening, once more, then I’d Rest In Peace
Cos its my belief that it’s the most expressive genre
A million concepts, true… and the list still get’s longer
With lyrical ponder, leaving ya thinking and absorbed
Of a sort you can relate, and coordinate to your thoughts
Cos I was taught to voice my opinion and stand tall
Strong, and to bounce straight back up after a fall
So I turned to hip-hop, it was my ships port of call
And conformed to my way of thinking, without sinking
Got me enthralled, then grew and evolved…convincing
It is… But real, went from listening to writing in an instant
Can’t resist it, typing every day taking hard drive space
What is this? Its replacing my interests in musical taste
Without haste, from second to first grade on constant play
To stay in the pit yakka territory, where I was born n raised
With the yakpak cos in reality it comes down to ya mates
And any thing else that lands on ya plate…. is a bonus
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Old 02-06-04, 10:12 AM   #2
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Nice one fag..where have you been hiding???...you had a excellent wordplay as usuall..and great flow and scheme...Good~Job~~~now..AIM me!!!!
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Old 02-06-04, 11:39 AM   #3
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Nice one fag..where have you been hiding???


Sums it up^... Lol...

Nah... Really where have your drops been?

Need more man...

Nice wordplay as Pen said...

Decent enough flow...

But... Maybe im just dumb... What is 1E?

So a didnt really understand most of it... Lol...

Keep at it...

Pz...
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Old 02-06-04, 07:04 PM   #4
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the 1E is just where im from....
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Old 02-06-04, 07:29 PM   #5
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decent drop, everything but the flow was on point, if not exceptional, but I do have to remark about your flow. It seemed to me, that about every once in a while, you would lose the flow, mostly due to bad transitions. But other then that, Wordplay=nice, meta's=nice, multis=decent, originality=decent, effort=decent, it just seemed like you didn't put to much into it. But don't get me wrong, it was a good piece, 7.5/10

If you could return the favor, and give an honest critique on my piece, in my sig, I would appreciate it.
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Old 02-06-04, 07:43 PM   #6
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This was a decent drop. It was an easy read. Some nice wordplay in the mix. It was pretty cool. Keep doing what you do.

Please drop deedbach here:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112603

Ps. where is the 1E?
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Old 02-06-04, 08:09 PM   #7
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split.. i didnt put much into it... jus wantedto post sumthin up... cos i aint been on much recently...so.... anyways thnx
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Old 02-07-04, 03:52 AM   #8
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hmm.....more feed?
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Old 02-07-04, 09:32 AM   #9
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The wordplay was nice on this one, the flow was consistent throughout with a simple but effective scheme, i was really feeling the content man, I think this was one fo the better pieces i read from you, and one of the better open mics at the mo, the quality of this piece due to wording and flow was what was wort my read.
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