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Smitten for my writtens coz i love the pen and pad free spitten and never bitten whether be good or bad got me mad,unsigned resigned a top seller but none sold strive to performe live never mimed whether be hot or cold i'm bold,and speak ma mind all the time line after line sunshine or freezin i'm breezin through ma climatizining rhymes coz it's prime time,shit that i flip my ignition is lit use a mit to extinguish tha heat flowin on beat when i spit i'm rich,nah broke havin laugh an joke money for bottled coke wi no bitches to poke coz i toke livin life lazy like crazy folk fukin joke,try an celebrate life but will never appreciate a wife can't ever caloborate,well sometimes i over elaborate with a knife sum life,can't add up why am i so hard up,maybe bad luck i also run amuck brushin off an crushin emcees lika monster truck |
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IP: 7397 5B10
I give it a 7/10...
thought it was decent, nice multi's, not really original but nice regardless.... even though I think verses about how tight you are is a played topic, yours was alright... lol, and I don't think climatizing is a real word, but do what you do... |
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![]() IP: 22D2 4A11
Good structure, good flow, needs better multies and vocab.
After reading it twice, it did have really dope flow,(bounce) to it Try making the multies, multi slyables more complicated endings at each line ![]() ![]() ![]() JamesJr.
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