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Old 02-05-04, 08:36 AM   #1
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Smitten for my writtens coz i love the pen and pad
free spitten and never bitten whether be good or bad
got me mad,unsigned resigned a top seller but none sold
strive to performe live never mimed whether be hot or cold
i'm bold,and speak ma mind all the time line after line
sunshine or freezin i'm breezin through ma climatizining rhymes
coz it's prime time,shit that i flip my ignition is lit
use a mit to extinguish tha heat flowin on beat when i spit
i'm rich,nah broke havin laugh an joke money for bottled coke
wi no bitches to poke coz i toke livin life lazy like crazy folk
fukin joke,try an celebrate life but will never appreciate a wife
can't ever caloborate,well sometimes i over elaborate with a knife
sum life,can't add up why am i so hard up,maybe bad luck
i also run amuck brushin off an crushin emcees lika monster truck
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Old 02-05-04, 08:42 AM   #2
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I give it a 7/10...

thought it was decent, nice multi's, not really original but nice regardless....

even though I think verses about how tight you are is a played topic, yours was alright...


lol, and I don't think climatizing is a real word, but do what you do...
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Old 02-05-04, 09:01 AM   #3
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Lightbulb Dope Structure

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Good structure, good flow, needs better multies and vocab.
After reading it twice, it did have really dope flow,(bounce) to it

Try making the multies, multi slyables
more complicated endings at each line




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