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02-03-04, 09:49 PM
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This is my first post!
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Gods Ironic Lessons.
IP: ED3C 7BC1
.......Sweat trickles painfully down this paranoia of being watched Pale white face sight erased as the blood runs thru the shock the omen, the stolen life of shadow peirces the open night close fist around his stick clenches stronger closing fright the expression of this lonely man was in pure hatred in this raise lifted my stomach my heart my soul with the lifting of his blade my body jerks with the swing as i find my soul n body awake.... I saw my death in this dream, death of my pure loves in the serene One memorie lay still, the horse of shrill death was already deemed intracit blueprint links will be torn with my wit ill run away yes flee Jump to the swift of my stallion sworn to protect my awful greed for my lover will never die without my saying, never ever willingly as she begins weary her tired eyes begin to close so hastely yes!..escaped the unescapable death,close this chapter as she rests lay her down to explore this new world of unlimited possiblities suddenly, most mysteriously, my feet are drawn to the soft clink of a mallet and a rock, the artist on this takes time to think moves backinto his shadows as to battle with foolish links the sculpture holds my soul in its intricite paterns and folds impressions of this will surely roll the years to be told among aspireing artists, students and scholars that mold must meet this man, mantic artist who holds such power on this rock but as his features become visible a familiar sense of shock as he holds his mallet in hand my pupils focus upon this crest engraved are a man mounted on a horse with anger on his chest i look eye and eye with death, now know the error of my ways he smiles as hes finished with the lettering "Here lies Lyle Drake" my pupils widen he doesnt know my identity he doesnt know my fate articulate some words"lets have lunch"as the murderer puts down his slate ..what to do as we seperate, i ask to spend the night for this is just the bait as this storm bursts thick and his wife begins to shake, ill lift with me a knife .Ill Drop my curtain and let My lover sustain her Drapes. ...Cold deaths hand meddles clearly in these lives, for God is a poet.... ...A man Dreams of Murder,his lovers fate he decides, for he wil hold it ...The Artist featured is God as he teaches ironic lessons the hard way ...He foresaw a face, didnt notice that it was his hand that held the blade.....
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02-03-04, 10:11 PM
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So Tired Of It.
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IP: 399E F0FD
dope dope dope...enjoyed this peice dao very nice...flow was definately on point.............the imagery was good and the vocab was dope..def. ironic situation sorta had me laughin at it..yet not..deep...keep droppin
hit this one up: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...4656post1154656
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02-03-04, 10:28 PM
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Here's Lookin At You Kid
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IP: 0574 D627
holy shit this was dope.......good vocab flow metas....wordplay.....strucuture good....
nice nice topic...good shit...keep droppin i liked this alot well worth the read..... peep that link ......he dissed us first....keep in mind .....but Great piece here....consistancy nice! ...9/10 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111983
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02-04-04, 03:10 AM
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This is my first post!
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IP: ED3C 7BC1
upppin for some feedback.
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<center> <img src="http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/attachment.php?attachmentid=9076&stc=1"</img> <A Href="http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111987">t</a> We hang the petty thieves and appoint the great ones to public office Aesop. |
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02-04-04, 08:20 PM
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This is my first post!
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IP: ED3C 7BC1
upppin smore.
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<center> <img src="http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/attachment.php?attachmentid=9076&stc=1"</img> <A Href="http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111987">t</a> We hang the petty thieves and appoint the great ones to public office Aesop. |
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02-04-04, 08:31 PM
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Banned: Spamming
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IP: 399E F0FD
First piece I've ever read by you..and I must say..very impressive..this was dope...your imagery was awesome...and the content was great..where have you been???..this was dope~~~peace..
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02-04-04, 09:52 PM
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This is my first post!
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IP: ED3C 7BC1
thanx for the feedback.
i guess ive been hybernating 
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<center> <img src="http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/attachment.php?attachmentid=9076&stc=1"</img> <A Href="http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111987">t</a> We hang the petty thieves and appoint the great ones to public office Aesop. |
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02-05-04, 01:41 AM
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Old School Sexy...
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IP: CB28 E7E2
nice.. i really liked this piece.. this was your ss piece wasn't it :O you had the good imagery throughout.. this was a really good piece, im going to have to start reading your stuff more often, do you have aim? we should collab
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02-05-04, 01:48 AM
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This is my first post!
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Azzazinx1
thankx for returning the favor o.o i didnt even have to post a link.nj.
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<center> <img src="http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/attachment.php?attachmentid=9076&stc=1"</img> <A Href="http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111987">t</a> We hang the petty thieves and appoint the great ones to public office Aesop. |
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02-05-04, 04:46 AM
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IP: 23B6 2C04
iight...
This was a cool drop... Had excellent imagery... Good vocabulry... Creativity was there... Flowed nicely... Not too sure about the putting the middle part in bold... Jus makes it harder to read... Nothin major... First thing ive read from you aswell... Drop some more... Hit up the Open Mics in my sig in return please... Thanks... Pz... |
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02-05-04, 07:56 PM
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This is my first post!
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IP: ED3C 7BC1
^i will...dont have time right now
upping.
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<center> <img src="http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/attachment.php?attachmentid=9076&stc=1"</img> <A Href="http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111987">t</a> We hang the petty thieves and appoint the great ones to public office Aesop. |
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