i catch my self
lookin off in the distance, buildin up a resistance ,
hopin not to beocme another rappers class of "for instance"
askin questions to the ecliptics like yo whats up with existance
is it all about the difference between the types in this bussiness
attemptin to build bridges, get vicious and still persist to spit with
lyrics too illicit to revisit and impress the people we live with
were either producers or losers not havin a choice to who uses
our music to get over they're useless forms of confusions
were sellin drugs to abusers, knowin damn well we should be sellin em nooses
to get over the pain that became the fame that were used to
u wanna get big now son? and be apart the who's who
just know that what ever you choose to beomce they'll abuse you
and what i'm sayin might amuse you, but it is found it's the truth
u want proof, see how many human bodies are becomin bulletproofed
a protection invention is becomin a lesson in "you should've dude"
it's to bad cause we all lose when beef comes down to whos to shoot
shit i wanna live to be continued...

Nice flow and topic. You have good ideas and thoughts that i comprehend.

thanks
iw ant some criticsm though
lemme knwo whats bullshit and whats hot
i wanna elevate and drop the bullshit

i'm rpelyin like crazy to all you out there and ain't gettin any love, c'mon now

Word@that. I've replied to probably 17 dudes and i struggle to get replies too.
Anyway, the piece was cool. Some nice multis, but some i didn't feel. The rhyme scheme was still good overall. I thought it was a pretty good piece. The only advice i can say is to focus the topic more, but even as it is, its a pretty nice piece. Keep doing it.

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thanks man bout time i got osme response

uppin

Stop Fuckin Sleepin