in the depths of doonside, darkness deals death to life
shadows hide the damned and doomed, moonlight delivers sight
drunken minds develop demons determined to decieve us...
decisions design and dictate different misdemeanors
devistation disturbs this disenchanting suburb
disorder draws its demise like destiny did its homework
but dont doubt the determination disguised as disgust,
defiance is displayed...but dared to be discussed
depression digs deep, distracts us during sleep
the disasters depleat our dreams in-to defeat
against those composed of deciet and disbelief
now we diversify into desires that dispute or delete
divergent debates against the distrustful /dash/ damaging
a direct defence descends, devoid of dilly-dallying
daily deja-vu discerns the dawn of delusions...
like how dissonant detrimental declarations plague humans

uppin for feedback/critique

I think I like this - and the way you played on that one sound. Managed to stick to your topic pretty well too. Nice flow - the consistent occurence of the D sounds ensured that it never got off track. There were a few places where it seemed like a word was thrown in just because it started with D but you carried mostly well. Hit my "Broken Metamorphosis" if you can.

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Personal Testament 3 (100 Bars)
Befuddlement
Broken Metamorphosis
Cud