I'm living a lie, each day is filled with broken promising
I pray to God but it's all seeped in hopeless dishonesty
He's on to me, secrets and lies are simply monotony
To me it's all the same, a life of sex, cash & pot you see
Is not for me, it's not like I'm afraid to kill or to die
I'm just scared that I might lie just one too many times
I've never let it show, but it's still killing me inside
No matter how many vows I just can't seem to comply

I'm trying to trade, all of the bullshit I've made
Want all my sins forgiven, I just want a fresh new slate
I'm trying to trade, all of the lies that I've made
To be good in God's eyes but I'm worthless as a slave...

I promised myself never again would I touch a cigarette
But as soon as I'm stressed, I just pretend to forget
Thinkin' I got a tough guy facade, I'm just tryin to impress
Bettin years from now sayin yes is somethin that I'll regret
Said I'm done pushin drugs on children in the community
But I keep dealin to kids who aint even gone through puberty
Sayin it's "cool" to see, these youngstas smokin tha Blu-burr-y
But they way too young why the fuck did I ruin they future dreams
I said never again will I hit another man
Next day I sent a punk spinnin like a ceilin fan
This dude talked too much smack, I said here's your warning
Didn't listen so I made like a typhoon and started storming
Late at night on my knees prayin to God imploring
"What if I neva threw a fist, would I still be here mourning?"
I wanted to visit was rejected but still offered yall
Cos I just wanted to say sorry I put you in the hospital

I'm trying to trade, all of the bullshit I've made
Want all my sins forgiven, I just want a fresh new slate
I'm trying to trade, all of the lies that I've made
To be good in God's eyes but I'm worthless as a slave...

3 deceits at once, beat the life outta a soldja
Whose name is now in the "death certificates" folder
That's right it's over, I'm so fuckin sorry neva shouda done it
Just thought if I got clappin and won I'd find it funny
But it wasn't, then makin deals utterin "...fine it's sold"
Never even stopped to think that this kid was 9 years old
Not only that, but I simply didn't wanna look wack so
I picked up that FAGGOT and sparked the tobacco
I know it's wrong, I've seen it firsthand, dying of cancer
But I can't do everything so tell me lord, what's my plan sir?

I'm trying to trade, all of the bullshit I've made
Want all my sins forgiven, I just want a fresh new slate
I'm trying to trade, all of the lies that I've made
To be good in God's eyes but I'm worthless as a slave...

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Comon upp please dont let this get slept on need some feed!

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Damnit not cool Im only gonna up this once a day til im not allowed to anymore but please peep!! ;\

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this is a realllllllly good piece dawg very well done, good flow, ya also got some wordplay in there to which i like a lot, vocab was good. 8 1/2 - 10. keep it up

CAN YA RETURN THE FAVOUR AND VOTE ON THIS BATTLE WHEN YOU REACH 100 POSTS

Yeah for shure soon as i get there, still uppin yo

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this was decent..your flow seemed choppy at few places and some of it seemed forced..but,other than that..your wordplay was decent,scheme was okay and content was good..so keep up the good work...read my new OM...Dream or Reality...I'm Dope biatch~~~~

Alright Im gonna be uppin this shit one more time to see if i can get anymore feedback, if not fuck it

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i really enjoyed that one. almost as much as my own. lol. j/k. but seriously you
got sum talent. i like how you had more than just one end rhyme kinda like my
own. it makes the flow superb. i realy like the topic an consistency. the meaning
in this was felt. and well portrayed. for sum reason this is one of the best i've read.
keep at it man. i want to collab with you. i've never collabed with anyone
before. pm me if ur up for it. aight.

pz

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hey this shit was aight man keep this shit coming night flow to it. though it was a bit rough in places. oother than that it was a nice peice to read i enjoyed it
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