Throughout your lifetime you might find you cross the line
Whether it be confined to trivial matters or major crimes
But remember ya mind, cos the horizon appears every morning
Comprising of 365 that’s forming the dawn of your calling
The voice willing you through the present, loud and enthralling
Shouldn’t ignore it, its an incentive to get past the scorning
Relentless of the facts, cos what fell has fallen, its done
Its dead and buried so change and run with the next direction
That’s manifesting in context with your own dissecting
The Chopping and slicing, on your journey to perfecting
What you call “my goal” keeps you on a steady momentum
The pendulum that keeps you focused and still contending
With the hell bend lending swaying your focus, impending
But with strength it’s amended if your destiny is chosen
Cryogenically frozen in a constant motion of forward going
Mind over matter is proven, so get in the zone and get moving
Sowing contusions with future’s stitches cos wishes mean shit
It comes down to grit, getting your hands dirty, ya gotta commit
The ones who resist are the ones stuck, fucked up in the past
Who come last, so stay strong and belong and stay in tact
Cos its fact, dwelling on history is a route to an untimely collapse…

Eh...pretty good
Flow was good..
Structure was nice
Vocab was used...
Imagery was also pretty nice
Dope piece tho....
Some lines could be re-worded better
But still........dope piece...

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thnx.. uppin....

Hmmm~~very very GAY...your selection of words were very very GAY~~the topic you have chosen also happens to be very very GAY~~(you probaly meant this to be GAY)~~your scheme was very very GAY~~your flow was very very GAY~~only thing that wasn't GAY about this piece was your imagery~~now that was just QUEER~~

PS~~this was dope Dev..holla at me~~~still upset???

you know I love you man!!!(Damn now I sound gay...LMao)

you little immature punk ass wannabe.... if you didnt live so far away id come over there and kick your spiney little ass to fuck.....

wtf.... come on ppl leave some feedback........

this was coo flow was ait...i didnt like the concept at all though
still a good piece however just not something i would read over
and over again...i guess it dont tickle my fancy....

keep dropping mofo

it was aight..
you had tha vocab down and tha flow but tha topic fell off so many times both from tha title and as a whole...It made me lost here and there...
also, you fell off at tha end a lil...
tha begginning was a lil slow to get into...
tha middle was strong and if tha whole flow was written that same way i would've seem it as a better piece...

overall: good drop n keep it up 8 / 10

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This was nice. I loved the flow of the. I dont know why, but i just liked it. The rhymeschems was cool. The content was decent. This was an easy and enjoyable read. Keep up the good work.

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