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02-17-04, 02:07 PM | #1 | |||||||
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Too Much Drama
IP: 7A52 73B1
Drama is everywere
but it seems nobody cares bullets left & right will I stay or get up & fight cops arresting people by there color one day they'll get shot & be put six feet under violence is the key to survial to stay friends or each others rival 4 those who think this read the bible 4 u it will be very reliable drama is like a plague 4 those who live in drama ur life is begin delay 14 & 15 year old kids shooting ending little kids lives parents wanting to save them if they try Puerto Ricans killing Puerto Ricans Blacks killing Blacks Damn! this dumb shit is wack
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02-17-04, 02:33 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: D145 BA95
This was ok. Open up some on your word usage. No prob on the subject and where you're trying to go with it. But if you're going to try and go...go all the way. Keystyle is nice if you have one but dont be fooled. Most of these cats getting mad props waste the ink and paper before calling what they do keystyles. You appear to have messages. If so. The best message is the one thought out. One
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02-17-04, 02:38 PM | #3 | |||
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IP: FAD9 BD2A
This piece was in all right piece..........I can see your message an what your trying to get accross......Keep it up......try an keep your flow consistent.....an up your vocab a bit.......this message would be great if you took the time to elaborate more on it.......keep at it dawg! hit my latest open mic up man! Thanks.....keep it up...
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02-17-04, 03:17 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 9058 C066
Yeah i agree this was alright overall i thought.....structure could be fixed up a bit though.....the flow in this was alright, it flowed through out the piece but it got off at some points though for me....vocab was ok, it should be up'd though...keep at it.
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02-17-04, 06:51 PM | #5 | ||||||||
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IP: 5CB8 BDE0
nice shit would have been better if it had alittle more vocab, other than that it flowed nice and had good message almost like them afterschool specials that use to be on at noon on nbc it's was good tho
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