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02-05-04, 12:07 AM | #1 | |||||||
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need help with my text presence
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i am often told that when i'm writing, i should try to make my writers voice stronger, so it will have more of impact on the readers. i dont really understand this, or how i would go about doing it. If anyone can help, it would be appreciated.
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02-05-04, 03:57 PM | #2 | ||||||
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Well...I assume you are talking about writting topicals...if so
writers voice is a very broad term...it emcompasses many things at once.. try using indirect metaphores, try using different styles... drop a work of yours in the Open Mic section and drop a link here and i will critique it harshly so you can learn from it |
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02-05-04, 04:49 PM | #3 | |||
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^Exactly..
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02-05-04, 05:17 PM | #4 | |||||||
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writers voice..make people feel not like they are reading but like they are actually listening to you. this may not be the most proper way to define this but it's my way.
dont just say "I couldnt sleep at night* you say... "the sheets were tangling around me in a boa constrictors grip". or "the blinking light from the alarm clock became my close friend". see your saying the same thing but in a different manor.
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02-05-04, 05:51 PM | #5 | |||||||
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=112013
this is the latest one, I would appreciate it if you critiqued it. |
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02-05-04, 07:00 PM | #6 | |||||||
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Writers voice is basically the difference between Nelly and Martin Luther King Jr...i dont get how someone could tell you how to strengthen your voice in a text battle, itd be more in face to face. but i guess try using words that are more captivating and moving...rather than just trying to find words that rhyme and fit the topic then formin bars, really spill your soul into it...if that makes sense to you
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02-06-04, 06:02 AM | #7 | ||||||
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kid honestly you are nice...that piece right there is tight i liked it
but i will show you were your flow fell off the seduction of destruction overbearing like most emotions within corruption, the abduction of hope its a koliediscope of colors blending in with themselves blind minds eye gropes for the fault of tears to fill wells ego swells, as she begins believing in her own deception breaking mirrors, cutting skin, decieving her own reflection no protection, her enemys launch attacks from with-in her narcicistic obsessions just subtract from her friends her eyes condemn the beauty seen by the rest of the world feeling like shapeless granite, but viewed as the perfect pearl /\flawless rhyming shit was dope shes the girl who's animosity for herself was her own demise hurling over fingers in her throat,mixed with excessive excercise /\nope stretched as fezzie how long can one survive with issues buried deep within the core with eyes that only derive whats optical, and never seeing more... /\back on flow again kid you just need polishing you have the imagery and the flow....honestly its just a matter of practice... i liked that shit a lot...ill holla at you for a collab sometime |
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02-06-04, 05:28 PM | #8 | |||||||
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sounds good, but i still don't understand the writers voice thing,
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02-06-04, 05:35 PM | #9 | ||||||
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you will in time...you will in time
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03-07-04, 09:46 PM | #10 | |||||||
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Hmm, i'm no expert, but maybe try extending ur use of punctation and caps, cos it'll make it clearer to the reader how it wud sound if u were spittin in real life. Use caps to show what words will be emphasised and volume. I mean fuck you, sounds tame compared to FUCK YOU!!! n its more realistic, no1 jus says fuck you in a normal voice. Haha, pretty shite example but u kno what I mean. If u were tryin 2 make it sound more personal, or if say it was retaliative (after they'd said it 2 u) u cud make it fuck YOU!!! dunno, jus sum ideas
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