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Old 03-18-04, 05:31 PM   #1
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2 Steps Ahead of Ya

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I'd be 2 steps ahead of ya if ya had 3 legs
and I'll knock ya on your ass like ya had 3 kegs
but if ya had 3 heads..
ya still wouldn't have enough brains to realize what the fuck- I -said
well I said duck dumb fuck
cause I starts to get on that bull-shit when i see red
and I see dead
like I have the sixth sense when I met
Bruce Willis and Haley Joel Osmet
stop it's 2 words I don't understand
so excuse me while stomp the shit outta yo man
Shit's outta ya hands
there's nothing you can do
cause if I com thru
than shits hittin the fan and shit's hittin his pants
like he watched a scary movie
cause I'd be scared as you'd be if I ran into me
I'm the uncrowned champion, I'm claimin the title
as the best emcee who can't even freestyle
I'm the winner, yall is natural born losers
cause ya hesitate, I'm a natural born shooter
I'm a problem to ya system like a..... cancerous tumor
but there's no cure or chemo for what I'm a do to ya
I'm too hot to handle, too cold to hold
too much for busters, too hard to fold
don't get me mad
cause I'm lethal with a pen and a pad

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Old 03-18-04, 05:48 PM   #2
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nice. The flow in the beginnin' was a little off in some of the parts. But the word usage and punchlines and other shit like that were good. You got some good talent, man, keep at it. Also, check out my "This Rap game" Freestyle.
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Old 03-18-04, 05:53 PM   #3
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Once again thanx dog, I'm a keep workin on this shit, see if I can type it so it sounds as good as when I say it. Oh and I just read your Rap Game freestyle, you got skills son. I don't have any negative feedback about it, it was some nice shit. 1

Yo can I get some more feedback?
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Old 03-18-04, 07:04 PM   #4
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I didnt really understand the first five lines but overall it eas hot.
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Old 03-18-04, 07:37 PM   #5
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Thanx fo the feedback Gabeezee, what didn't you understand though.

Can I get some more feedback yall.
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Old 03-18-04, 07:44 PM   #6
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The first five I couldnt tell were the bars ended or wether the just contiued on
but the rest flowed together
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Once again thanx dog, I'm a keep workin on this shit, see if I can type it so it sounds as good as when I say it. Oh and I just read your Rap Game freestyle, you got skills son. I don't have any negative feedback about it, it was some nice shit. 1

Yo can I get some more feedback?

thanks, man. And as for u trynta to type it like how u say it, that's the same problem I have. People said the flow wasn't good in some areas, but it depends on how fast you are supposed to say it.
Also, what Gambino said about ur first 5 lines, is what I also meant didn't really flow that well. But then again, it might flow when you say it. But it's some good stuff.
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