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Aint it strange how a manner of toungue, no matter how clever
Could be dismissed in one mind yet in another lodge forever Together emcee's could endeavour to keep impressin With flows laced and imbedded in moral lessons And unless my thoughts are layed off on resbite i wont be depressed by people who deteste my style I'll protest my rights that I step by And perfect rhymes till I flow fluid like the Nile. And in time these rhymes could find a way to bind thoughts into your head that originally came from mine At this point I'm doin fine but I'm not up to that par My rhymes are info shot across my brain as a spark Jotted in ink on paper to leave points in my life marked And to find understanding to light my way through the dark / struggle Mis-understood teens stand in huddles, raised by single mothers leave you in a blood puddle for fun Raised on lower class society since there life begun Got thoughts and feelings too, but are labbelled as scum And the only way we are recognised is through flows or bass n drum Thats why you gotta voice your opinions to the public from your lungs And in a small fraction of this minority that thrive on street life a beat might cause a light to be flicked on in deep night To express the feelings caused by life n the government Im that one in a million chance ,a rare find, a gem what ya think. Praise, citisism jus gimme some feedback Last edited by Moto : 03-28-04 at 06:43 PM. |
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Nice job on this......wordplay and vocab was nice.....structure could use work...flowed nicely and was easy to read.....big up to ya homie........6/10mics
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