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Topic : Street War

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That Old School Mother Fucker

Aint That A Bitch?

Crhyme Sindicate

lol aiight checkin in.............killah bwoy....no showing,....naww

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KiLlAh BwOy

lol...aight werd...checked in...........................

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That Old School Mother Fucker

Aint That A Bitch?

Crhyme Sindicate

Check it…

Me and my boys got a lot of beef wit otha cats….

Its time to settle it….

This is our street war…

Well our crew was rollin wit only 5 heads that night…
They had 5 too so I guess it was an even matched fight…
We’ve had beef for 2 years and have had our share of rumbles…
But this fight decided it all, LOSE and your crew will crumble…
Tension was building so we had to get it over with…
So we were meeting up in the lot of Anderson and fifth…
Got my crew together, told them the plans, then we bounced…
Nervousness mixed with excitement, feelings can’t be pronounced…

On our way…

We are joking around, our true emotions not showing…
Getting louder and louder, approaching with anticipation growing…
This shit was serious, so we brought some weapons just incase…
But we were pretty sure that we’d only need fists to bust in their faces…
I brought a knife, and eryone else had their nines…
Than our mood switched, we were behind enemy lines…
Seemed like everything got darker and the air was thick…
But we’d be out of there soon, shit like this happens quick…

Arrive at Anderson and fifth lot…

They all chillin on the dumpster and got up when we walked in…
Seein all their faces, our anger rises from within…
They come up to us and we start talking shit…
All up in our faces, I was ready to throw the first hit…
But my older brother shows up and smashes a bottle…
Now we got an extra head, things started to go full throttle…
I crack the boys face n he falls to the ground…
Everyone was poundin eachotha when I looked around…
I kick him in his face, CRACK, there goes his nose…
Blood all over the ground but I had more blows to compose…
Let him get up, give him confidence, than make it fall…
Kick in his knee, it breaks, now all he can do is crawl…
I show no sympathy for this faggot so I kick up dirt into his face…
Now I move on to help my boys, leave him on the ground like a disgrace…

Help out…

My boys got their shit handled perfectly so keep a look out…
This time of the fight is when we hear the cop sirens shout…
Our whole crew survived the rumble and now for the get away…
Sirens are loud, 5 cats on the ground, hopefully cops won’t get slayed…
We go through the alleys, creepin slowly, not to be heard…
Wanna get away with this shit and live as if nothing occurred…
Suddenly the flashing lights are shining down the alley way…
I stopped and wondered what to do, my mind was put on a delay…

Run…

We all get split up, it was every man for himself, shit got crazy…
It was getting darker and moist, the alleys got hazy…
I started getting chased by a cop and got light headed…
I knew I couldn’t out run him so I did something we dreaded…
Had to go head on wit a cop, shit odds were against me…
I had my knife, but shit I didn’t wanna get charged wit battery…
Minds racing and he’s approaching faster and faster…
He was becoming more visible, approaching was disaster…
Pulls out his gun and tells me to get on the ground…
I dunno what the fuck I was doing, my body turned around…
My legs started to run, my mind was still where I was standing…
My body did what it wanted without my mind demanding…
The cop yells again for me to stop or he will open fire…
My mind was telling my body to stop, but it took the cop for a liar…
Gun shout ring out from the cops gun, straight into my body they soar…
I’ll be forgotten about in a week, just another casualty of a street war…

werd

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That Old School Mother Fucker

Aint That A Bitch?

Crhyme Sindicate

tic toc........ur a slow typer lol................

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That Old School Mother Fucker

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Crhyme Sindicate

this life aint a joke nigga,,not even cops can hold us back when a STREET WAR is poppin ..yeah ...lets go

Blood on my shirt as my homeboi lays dead on the floor/
reloading my nine,i knew it was time to settle the score/
Called up my homeboi J told him to meet me infront of the store/
5 of my boyz dead in 1 week,I can't take this anymore/
Blastin bullets in the sky as the empty clips drop to the floor/
I realized my whole life is filled with drugs,violence and gore/
Wrote a note on my crew door,its time for STREET WARZ/

Rollin in my cadillac pissed from last nite/
windows rolled low incase i see those bitches in sight/
the glass smashes as a bullet fires from the right/
We dove out the car,gats in hand,ready to fight/
couldn't see shit the sparks from the guns was our only light/
a bullet skinned my face and hit a child from the other side of the street/
I COULD NOT BE BEAT,about 2 niggaz dropped to my feet/
sweat dripping down my face from the heat/
I could here the sound of empty clips falling on the concrete/
i could hear sirens from a distance and someone shouted THE POLICE!/

2 of my niggaz jumped in the car,the other 5 were dead/
I wanted to cry but now wasnt the time i couldnt get that shit stuck in my head/
for the first time i wished i was at home safe in my bed/
But im out here dodgin bullets,runnin from the cops instead/
the cops hit our side and the car started swirvin to the left/
realizin this wasnt our car if we got caught we'd also be charged with grand theft/
The cops started shooting, popped a bullet in the tank and popped a bullet in the tire/
we dove out the machine as the car bursted in fire/
I saw a red scope aiming right on my boyz head/
in a split second a shot rang out and he was dead/
I screamed in rage and started shooting back at the cops/
I started in surprise as i saw one of the police officers drop/
shots started blasting and then the remaining 3 of my niggaz fell/
i knew if i died now i was going straight to hell/
i clicked the trigger but nothing was left in the chamber/
not knowing what to do i screamed fuck in anger/
then i remember the gun in my sock,i pulled it out and started to laugh/
I put the gun to my head and pulled the trigger..BOOOOM/
killah bwoy was once a happy kid,now hes just a thing of the past/



done

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KiLlAh BwOy

ok good spit...seemed like ours were close to the same lol...great writers think alike...okay uppin for dem votes

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That Old School Mother Fucker

Aint That A Bitch?

Crhyme Sindicate

yeah that was truth..i didnt read yours i had to think........lol

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KiLlAh BwOy

Both verses were very thought out and detailed. I liked them both. L.I came with a more "It could happen" scenerio while Killah Bwoy's seemed like pure fantasy. Both never strayed from topic and seemed like they had a passion for what they were writin. This was a tough one to judge, but I gotta go with L.I on this one since his was more realistic. It made me feel like I could actually see the events........

Vote:L.I

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yeah good honest vote playa.................this was a good battle

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KiLlAh BwOy

fasho...nice feedback....and thanks for the vote....uppin this....drop a link and ill be more than happy to return the favor with an honest vote!!!

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That Old School Mother Fucker

Aint That A Bitch?

Crhyme Sindicate

uppin............................................. ..................................

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That Old School Mother Fucker

Aint That A Bitch?

Crhyme Sindicate

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=119676

hit this battle up right quick aight ya'll.

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Alright.. didn't say no crew votes, so I'll drop an honest vote, if you wanna DQ it though that's cool. Both of your verses were really nice, I liked how both of you ended it with the narrator dying. Personally though, I like LI verse a bit more.. Killa it seems like you kinda new to Topical, I didn't feel like your flow matched the story telling nature of the verse as much as LI's. You also jumped around a bit more than LI, like check your first stanza:

"

Blood on my shirt as my homeboi lays dead on the floor/
reloading my nine,i knew it was time to settle the score/
Called up my homeboi J told him to meet me infront of the store/
5 of my boyz dead in 1 week,I can't take this anymore/
Blastin bullets in the sky as the empty clips drop to the floor/
I realized my whole life is filled with drugs,violence and gore/
Wrote a note on my crew door,its time for STREET WARZ/"

The "drugs, violence and gore" line seems kinda out of place, like the narrator has this realization and then... nothing.

Like I said though, sick verses from both of you, much respect for even doing a topical, but I felt like LI really painted a story that was kinda more realistic and I was feeling it more.

v/LI

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