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say dogg dont you have a PM?????????????????????????

alright dogg im gonna spit gimme some time though

anyone wanna battle me im up for it, new blood in the game ghetto is for real

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I'll "snatch your Necklass" then show the main-attractrion
When I shoot your Brain-in-fractions, that's called a "Chain-Reaction"


i'll destroy your brain/till your body crashes like a derailed train/shatter everyone of your veins/just too watch you scream in pain/till they decalare mantally insane.
i hope yo rymes are updated/and verbally stated/cause yo shit looks like somthing you just ejaculated.
i'll hit you with a full force to the abdomen/stab you with a javuline/leave yo ass so bloody they wont know which casket you in.
im comin at you with LYRICAL FORCE/cause when i strike i show no remorse.
i stand alone/im the king of this throne/i'll beat you so bad just to hear you MOAN and GROAN/break all your bones.
leave yo ass in the middle of the desert strangled and raped to death/with duct over your ankles and a paper bag to take a breath.

its a little shorter but i dont give a F$*@!!!!!!!@!

battle me? dog i end carrers if you step wid it/
have yo ass doin mtv shows, like Xibit/
Im Blaze a.k.a. emcee with a sweet flow/
i see what u thinkin when i leave yo brains with a peephole/
you an emcee faker than a new hair weave/
the only time you blast guns is new on years eve/
i got niggas shook, online digital flinching/
this aint rap, its a fukkin lyrical lynching/
yea. my rap style is sick, im a nasty nigga/
my bars blow shit up like an iraqi nigga/
you soft like butt cheeks, im grimy like mud fights/
you aint a rapper, the only bars you know serve bud lights/
its a TKO when my punchlines punch dude/
i leave you full holes like that yellow sponge dude/
Yo Mr. Moderator, where you find these people?/
i eat these stray cats like chinese people/
Dog, its ok if you wanna sing for a minute/
but next time you wanna battle dog, think for a minute/

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hey...Deleon won this one cuz basicly..he had better punch..and had multi's unlike you man..like why did u use nigga twice...

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ass. if you read the rhyme you would get the scheme. nasty nigga rhymes with iraqi nigga. if you knew rap music you would know most rappers use rhyme scheles that sometimes have the same word at the end.

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for real dogg
listen to styles p "My Life" good example of a scheme that uses nigga

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that was a balze umm juss blaze got this.. he got this with using punches not always heard.... like this..

yea. my rap style is sick, im a nasty nigga/
my bars blow shit up like an iraqi nigga/
you soft like butt cheeks, im grimy like mud fights/
you aint a rapper, the only bars you know serve bud lights/

juss sick. witht he blaze...
juss blaze
compo 8/10
struct 8.5/10
flow 9/10
vocab 6/10
rhyme 7/10

deleon
compo 7/10
struct 6/10
flow 6/10
vocab 7/10
rhyme 8/10

my votes goes to juss blaze

My vote goes to Blaze...

Delon:
I'll "snatch your Necklass" then show the main-attractrion
When I shoot your Brain-in-fractions, that's called a "Chain-Reaction"

Not a bad line, necessarily; it flows well, decent multi though the "main-attraction" line sounds bit forced...I'd try and start a little more personal thought...generic battle opener...

i'll destroy your brain/till your body crashes like a derailed train/shatter everyone of your veins/just too watch you scream in pain/till they decalare mantally insane.

Again, generic battle shit. Nothing too clever.

i hope yo rymes are updated/and verbally stated/cause yo shit looks like somthing you just ejaculated.

Pointless...all rhymes are "verbally stated"...to state something you must make it verbal...generic...

i'll hit you with a full force to the abdomen/stab you with a javuline/leave yo ass so bloody they wont know which casket you in.

Same as above...

im comin at you with LYRICAL FORCE/cause when i strike i show no remorse.

Blah...

i stand alone/im the king of this throne/i'll beat you so bad just to hear you MOAN and GROAN/break all your bones.

Ditto.

leave yo ass in the middle of the desert strangled and raped to death/with duct over your ankles and a paper bag to take a breath.

Again, no logic...if you're strangled you're not breathing and, really, WTF does a paper bag have to do with that?

Overall, it does flow well; doesn't seem to get too stuck on syllables. Had some mutlis, but they were wasted on weak, generic punches...and, I admit, generic punches can win battles...but at least they have to be GOOD generic punches...

Juss_Blaze:

battle me? dog i end carrers if you step wid it/
have yo ass doin mtv shows, like Xibit/

Hmmm...I guess it depends which side of the underground v. commercial argument you're on, but most folks don't consder rocking MTV to be career-ending...

Im Blaze a.k.a. emcee with a sweet flow/
i see what u thinkin when i leave yo brains with a peephole/

AH! FINALLY! A good, strong, clever punch...That line should've been your first one.

you an emcee faker than a new hair weave/
the only time you blast guns is new on years eve/

Weak, played setup but followed up with a strong punch so it's forgiven a bit...

i got niggas shook, online digital flinching/
this aint rap, its a fukkin lyrical lynching/

Boring and generic...

yea. my rap style is sick, im a nasty nigga/
my bars blow shit up like an iraqi nigga/

I'm also not a fan of rhyming with the same word and the punch here just isn't strong enough to justify it....

you soft like butt cheeks, im grimy like mud fights/
you aint a rapper, the only bars you know serve bud lights/

Nice nice line...flows a little off but, again, forgivable...

its a TKO when my punchlines punch dude/
i leave you full holes like that yellow sponge dude/

The punch could've been good, the setup wasn't great and, again, with the same worded rhyme...

Yo Mr. Moderator, where you find these people?/
i eat these stray cats like chinese people/

Eh, not the worst line in the rhyme, but not that great either...more same word rhyme shit...

Dog, its ok if you wanna sing for a minute/
but next time you wanna battle dog, think for a minute/

Weak...never should've been the closer...You shoulda stopped at the Bud Light line..

Overall: You win cuz you had a few clever punchlines...neither verse was all the strong. Yeah, using the same word to rhyme can work if the punch is REALLY strong/clever, but doing it over and over just makes you look less creative and like you have a limit vocab.

Vote for Juss_Blaze...

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