This muhfukin YungAMO on RB and im bout to
do the damn thang so let it slide

Now im bak on the blok workin still makin my bread
got alot of hood niggas so i got plenty to spread
im lovin life every second i show my teeth
except for a hater that i dont know he already got beef
and every body knows but i dont keep their suggestions
i cant see em through the pictures so i keep the projections
whos expandin obviously not me
i could call myself Fablous cause im livin the street dreams
a model of self control but no one bitches
its gonna take more than a doctor to patch up those stitches
niggas bringin plats back to the projects
but not me cause rappins my number one object
its a thin line between beefin and chill
my gloks locked so im ready to kill
people fear wat they dont understandso now they fallin
now that im comin im real forever ballin
damn now people see me as a monster
trakin niggas in cars faster than on star
im killin

im not sure i can list all that is wrong with this rhyme...but let me try

1. Amature wordplay
2. Bad structure
3. subpar vocab.
4. very basic rhymes


theres more trust

this is juss very basic, every aspect of the rhyme needs work, this is complete garbage, its a worn out type of topic, and it aint a good topic anyway

anyway...........3/10

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the fuck u is?

for a keystyle/freestyle this is actually ok, alot of freestyles r similar cuz when peeps freestyle the obvious things to bust about is ya bois, guns, drugs, street life etc.

so fuck wat the herb above said, obviousley a hatin moron, this was an ok piece...

holla...

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fuck you, you cant FREESTYLE in text no way you can, if yur writting it you have time to think about it, this suxz, elevate

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If you want a freestyle I'll do one in a yahoo chat sometime...
Showing that freestyles can have nothing to do with guns and shit

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<center>The Text God</center>

yo dogg i know i got some shit to work on im new at this shit u know just a beginner
so stop hatin and let me do my thang damn yo Krysis thanx homey

YungAMO keep doin ya thang that nigga just tryna get as close to beef as he can

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beezy crew fo life
1 love live life
2 the fullest

HOLLA @YA GIRL

beezy crew from life to death
n when I die put the colors across my chest

is that beazy from FU? cuz if it is, let me jsuss say he got banned for bitting constantly whole verses and shit

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yo this shit was aight but coulda been better. despite wat other niggas say i thought ya structure and flow was good. could use some metas or similes more wordplay and a little more vocab. Keep Elevating

holla back at mine
THE SICKEST OF SICK

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yo man he just beginining like me so dont be hatin maybe he get betta but fo now that was ok.